| The Adverse Effects of Marriage
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dmartin
| This bedroom | 1 |
reeks of sweat | 2 |
and mid-afternoon sex, | 3 |
but in fifteen years | 4 |
its safe to say | 5 |
that it won't smell that way. | 6 |
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22 May 05 |
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The first three lines held so much promise and I wanted you to take it higher, and then the crash landing. I know it's the truth but a poetic lie would have been nice..
— cowork
HAHAHA!!! this made me laugh out loud! very nice, very nice.....
the only thing i might change is replace the "and" on line 4 with "but".
cuz im just that picky :)
— woman_power
:-)
Suggestion:
that it will no longer
smell that way.
— Seahorse
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