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Its Windy Alright
dmartin

The view of Lake Michigan from North Avenue Beach
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drifts with the white caps of the miniature waves,
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in the distance sits a lit up ferris wheel
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at an empty Navy Pier.
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A lifetime lasting three months ends and
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the ivy covers the brick wall in late September
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as Addison Avenue crawls with the drunken fans
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of a game they call America's passtime.
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The city looks so small atop a tower
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lurching over the backs of it's little brothers,
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and millions walk as millions are spent
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on something they used to call the Miracle Mile.
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Reborn in a miraculous city
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and home is six hours away in a state
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where I can point out where I live on my hand.
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At this rate, I'd rather use that hand
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to wave goodbye and start over wherever this wind will take me.
 17

26 May 05

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This is more prose-y than it is poetic. I like it, though. It's not generally a topic I enjoy, but I took interest in this. Very nice.
 — hemothymia

Sounds more like a paragraph than a poem but then again what is poetry but prose in freeform structure?
I like the aliteration in lines 11 - 13.
Same thing in line 17.
Well done.
 — TheHarlequin

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