| Telepathic Inquisition
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themolly
| i want to be bent over | 1 |
held down | 2 |
and drilled like I used to be | 3 |
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i want the same thrill | 4 |
i want you to beat me in | 5 |
with that nineteen year old intesity | 6 |
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can you promise me that | 7 |
give me back that | 8 |
nostalgic perfect feeling | 9 |
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can it be like that | 10 |
when i manifest | 11 |
another of our "chance meetings"? | 12 |
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6 Jun 05 |
Rated 9 (7.3) by 6 users.
Active (6): 5, 8, 8, 10, 10, 10
Inactive (13): 1, 1, 1, 2, 8, 8, 8, 8, 9, 9, 9, 10, 10
(define the words in this poem)
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Pretty good poem
— unknown
Try a question mark on the last line and then get to a recording studio because this would be good hard piece of music!
— Isabelle5
very sexy. NOT decent poem tho.
— cruellshoos
I think this is nasty. To TheMolly....NASTY = SEXY
— themolly
I really like this one, going on my fav list
— HeidiHo
heidi likes a pervy poem! heidi likes a pervy poem! MISSION ACCOMPLISHED.
— themolly
eh........
ok. it's a little different. are we happy now?
— themolly
Poem is revolutionary, well done.
— Wix
themolly open and close italic or bold tags with a space inbetween on the first line so it doesn't veer to the left (little tip thing)
not so sure about the isolated question mark, but this a good tight poem.
— kaleidazcope
Thanks kal
— themolly
themolly, if poetry was a sex organ, id put our poems together. <3 (p.s. this poem is very good and sexy)
-someone
— unknown
Thank you for the compliment. You are too too kind.
— themolly
I really want to know who said that last "sex organ" comment. Dare you disclose yourself?
— unknown
yeah yeah yeah. thanks for the new 1s
— unknown
fuck those dicks
— BoundFeet
assholes look out. we're coming
— tiedtoes
It's certainly not the most horrible poem I have ever read in my life, but it's not very good either.
— marchhare
well that's awful sweet. Thanks for the shit rating.
— unknown
I'm seeing a "bent over manifesto" theme in your poetry. And i'm liking it.
This leaves me wanting to know more about the story behind it. It's pretty sick really. I like it. Sounds like something that should be yelled at someone, really loud.
— JessieVideo
The story goes:
I have an old lover that calls to me telepathic-style occasionally. I do it to him as well. We have a very strong connection, despite the distance between us.
I have built our old relationship up in my mind (like so many of us do), and I know full well that we could never actually live up to it. But we can in my mind.
— themolly
i dont like the layout. either have it all centered, or jumbled, but you cant do both! not in my opinion, anyway :P
love the poem, but
— Lia
i like butts
— unknown
lol, not quite what i meant, or said, for that matter
— Lia
o-k
— unknown
The last stanza's good - actually the poem's not bad - there's a tension juxtaposed with longing that has energised a great deal of art to come out of unrequited love. My favourite poem is Paul Verlaine - he wrote a fair bit of stuff not dissimilar to this.
— opal
poet - not poem
— opal
ah, the ORISINAL telepathy poem and best in my mind (not that you would know that of course because telepathy is impossible). You're a bit rude themolly.
— Kauf
sorry, original.
— Kauf
I gave this a 10 but the rating didn't change, how so?
— Kauf
I'm rude? How so?
— themolly
By that I mean your subject matter, rather than writing ability which seems polished. I just wondeed why, I suppose.
Maybe I'm a prude.
— Kauf
The title's good.
— Hear
ok...what about the poem?
— unknown
I'm not sure if there's anything wrong with it, really. The first few lines are good, but after that, it loses its potency.
That might just be me.
— Hear
i don't know. something about i really like, and something about i really don't like. can't figure it out. i think it has really good language use, though.
— lillas
um thanks...i think
— unknown
maybe you don't like it because it's naughty. hmm?
— unknown
I have a thing for prudes, Kauf. I really like to bring them over the the dark side, if you know what I'm saying; much more satisfying than conquering a stud. I'll take the nerd everytime.
— themolly
oooooh
— unknown
huh?
— themolly
mmmmmmmmmmmk
— themolly
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