| Ugly Hormones
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themolly
| ripped | 1 |
there is a crack in me | 2 |
it's deep | 3 |
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if you look in there | 4 |
you will see | 5 |
i am really not that pretty | 6 |
really | 7 |
the picture of pity | 8 |
you looked in there | 9 |
at all | 10 |
to see | 11 |
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love is leaking out | 12 |
on the couch | 13 |
all over the bed | 14 |
every night when i sleep | 15 |
my libido was taken up months ago | 16 |
my skin's gone back to high school | 17 |
so | 18 |
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i am less than before | 19 |
i am less flooding the floor | 20 |
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somebody come to help me | 21 |
somebody come to stop the leaking | 22 |
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i'm bleed ing | 23 |
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21 Jun 05 |
Rated 6.5 (7) by 2 users.
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Inactive (6): 1, 8, 10, 10, 10
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This almost sounds like that disease where you bleed out of every hole in your body until you die.
— pennylane
Ebola - not pretty, neither is this.
— unknown
sucks.
— unknown
Wow. Is that true?
— Estrella
You changed the title but the content is the same. I don't understand it so I can't rate it.
— Isabelle5
isa,
what is there to not understand? this is about someone who has lost their love. NOT a person that they loved, but literally their ability to have love has gotten away.
— unknown
Is it better?
— unknown
i don't know if it's better, but i like it.
— unknown
i would strike 'all my' from 9 and lose the spacing in 17 but otherwise quite powerful.
veddy good.
— noodleman
thanks noodler
— unknown
betterfulten
— noodleman
I love you, noodle.
— unknown
I adore this poem [I've written here before but I don't know if it was accepted], and my fave line is "my skin's gone back to high school so" Mind gripping.
— silverchyld
i wrote this after reading a friends work about nightmares.
— unknown
Although the poem is powerful it is also completely negative having created a stark scenario where the speaker berates his/herself senseless, your choice of words here are apt and convey a feeling of loss of life in its basest terms with strength and style.
The poem is vague in places and meaning is lost but IS undeniably striking:
"i am less than before
i am less flooding the floor"
— Kauf
Thankyou Kauf
— unknown
a little different. Is it improved??
— unknown
nice flow. i like the two opening i's in the fourth stanza, it feels innocent. very sparing but delivers a startling situation, and message even, message of crushed love.
— listen
thank you
— unknown
Umm, nope. Nothing there.
— unknown
no offence but that poem sux make a new one!
— unknown
how could that not be offensive?
— unknown
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