| watching the days burn out like cigarettes
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stateofmind
| she took a drag and time d r a g g e d on | 1 |
as the cherry end glowed on the right side of the ashtray | 2 |
momentarily flickering, burning, fading out | 3 |
bitter remnants of a quick fix. | 4 |
she sighed in retrospect | 5 |
with that familiar feeble grin. | 6 |
the ashtray metaphor. | 7 |
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23 Jun 05 |
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very nice imsgery although when i look at a cigarette cherry isnt the color i see u should well im not gonna tell you you should but a nice idea would be to add tangerine en glowed instead nice work good shish
— speech_less
Ohh this is very creative...nice metaphor.
— Delicatelie
The end of the cigarette is called the 'cherry.' It's a slang term. It's making reference to the glow of the red-orange ember on the end. Not to be taken literally. Well, maybe a little. Haha.
— stateofmind
Momentarily flickering is almost redundant.
You said ashtray twice.
I think there are a lot of wasted words.
Not bad, though, interesting.
— unknown
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