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Pc message board idea jousters
netskyIam

Sabres crossing in the night in
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struggles they love more, these fights
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to pin or point
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at the other's chin;
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two feel alive,
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more in one skin
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It is not just a phrasing: French
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and who does not ejaculate
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or thrill for that word "touche!"
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at fence?
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25 Jun 05

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zorp!
 — onklcrispy

ahaha--
 — youthculture

heh.
 — midare

A bit deep, can I get an explanation on this?
 — Wix

Interestingidea -needs to be developed more
 — larrylark

Wix: means that our heated discussions and plays on the board are really quite sexual at their root.  As a horn-dog, myself I say: all interactions between spirited people are sexual sublimations.   larrylark: Perhaps it is too short. I see your point. It's easy to get an idea but often hard to put into a form of just the right length.   I shall try this poem at another board without the personalized title.  I bet it will become shark chum!  (grins and thanks, all)  BUT! At this point I still prefer it in this brief form-- let it be a poem overtly about sex?  Why not.  In fact, it nearly is just that.   -grins with thanks- reid
 — netskyIam

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