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bus tour in the isle of kabba
onklcrispy

--kabba kong go fly--
 1
fly in houseplant is go!!
 2
in aged bulge obnoxious citing fetus go!!
 3
somewhere on...and zombie dead, you crotch my cross
 4
fly a hole fly!
 5
exhausting houseplant changing is obnoxious fly!!
 6
tokyo, being haircut birds, hole speak plant-photo-tournament
 7
guizeppe call citing: a bunch, with underground scumbags
 8
fly a hole fly!
 9
 
 
for does facts stop at consignment?
 10
does facts stop at cease?
 11
does facts stop at wijnopslag ?
 12
does facts stop at gimlet lace?
 13
who does facts stop at shrub shrub?
 14
you have turned over likewise cordial pie houseplant at dingsananas
 15
you driving a carrot in the jungle
 16
someone is wearing a coat
 17
the houseplant is tired
 18
drill you hookers
 19
drill tokyo
 20
drill disgusted
 21
drill change citing your panties
 22
drill is difficult...you fearful birds, being exhausting is fly!
 23
fly scumbags!
 24
 
 
 
 
--kabba kong buy hat--
 25
santa of time grows again.
 26
where fish your future flabbot comes
 27
informs the fish, to receive and meurt
 28
 
 
santa of time grows again
 29
the baby energy which became bald and becomes bald
 30
i right, again fucked as bus!!
 31
 
 
he new Sucking on have relocated off
 32
right out dying every bald
 33
everything bald so embryonic on comics
 34
 
 
so can bald
 35
so bald, so Every bald
 36
so embryonic Glory am again by tai and over
 37
 
 
corpse santa fell of time  
 38
just I go again
 39
everything dying dead
 40
i bald, hair, so can bald
 41
 
 
 
 
--kabba kong sing--
 42
the animal of minimum makes the back end of echidna
 43
i uses bullshit frightened
 44
enfant, these driven day of the tonka
 45
gizzard gizzard happy sujet
 46
you're his gizzard
 47
 
 
who takes sweepings of tonka?
 48
drive molleja where those he sjuet
 49
wild pockets happy day carries frightened
 50
the wild wild happy bullshit
 51
 
 
the driven uses the gizzard
 52
outside sujet word uses the Joey driven gizzard
 53
 
 
 
 
--kabba kong loses luggage--
 54
kabba of krasgeluid of krasgeluid of the hand party geit You adjusted with the handwaffeln yard
 55
as for us us who are given the safe sack
 56
to  other The went leading bags
 57
this  made bags guest bags
 58
so the fire of the straw of the wind of stereocelbrities as for zabbo
 59
 
 
nothing elizabethan
 60
though i of the flown
 61
is praised elizabeth of the sack, by many kabbaolieboorder
 62
kabba flown José
 63
hootenanny, to  settlement
 64
 
 
i all  religious vagina bags
 65
celebritykabba throw Hollywood
 66
because of kabbazakken and the religion waffle
 67
with kong of kabba of the sack of the other
 68
 
 
 
 
--kabba kong read bones--
 69
please achieve better threadbare that's a hereby transcended I advance gas
 70
in case that all-inclusive also artful both also asinine.
 71
desire thinking that publish about to advent gaily
 72
abolish gaily well into facts cease well into desire thinking along with your adolescence
 73
bad mood that's a all by oneself chime along with acridity , both acridity along with bad mood
 74
savage being feel on the order of donate we mobile
 75
a few have eatery a decent great many charcoal
 76
iI advance gas that is the one fickle fact cease well into I look - as of - cat eye
 77
 
 
you looked at it not to be there, which approximately was enjoyed
 78

26 Jun 05

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fucked as bus.

very interesting.
 — claudia

wtf? acid trip?
 — unknown

obviously onklcrispy (?), cant wait to see if I'm right.  Though I find this little long, I couldnt tell you what to take out. I absolutely love L65 - 68, and many others, though those ones will stick with me. I read it a few times, and it was insanely hard to read the first, which I loved, it was challenging poetry. Absolutely wonderful, and I'm sure I'll never understand half of it, which makes it better. Thanks for the read.
 — shadowskiss

yes, I was write, again, lovely, just lovely.
 — shadowskiss

wow, I wrote "write" that's just.. well, sad. I was *RIGHT. Wow, just, wow.
 — shadowskiss

"the wild wild happy bullshit"
Truly Onk.
 — unknown

!
 — unknown

i like it, "both acrdity along with bad mood" ha! i like it
 — Odin

this made me think of pelicans hopping out of the bathroom to the unrestrained rhythm of a 12" full of pianos, trumpets and drums.

kaleidazcope
 — unknown

It makes me think of four things:

Foto Fridays, your life story, your life story's life story and crazy people on the outside.

Are you okay? It doesn't seem like you were when you wrote this. I'm sorry. *big hug*

The first part made me think of how Foto Friday came into existence here. I think we all needed a breeak with reality at that point..and Foto Friday made lots of people happy.

The second part made me think of my favourite Foto Friday pictoor--the one of that man in a Superman outfit looking out around at the world in all its glory and maybe not so much glory, but balding middle aged men dressed as Superman makes more sense than balding, middle aged men dressed as Santa Claus.

The third part makes me think of trying to sing you a song, one of baby joeys and echidnas swimming in a little bowl over a bridge labelled "Chris' Dinners".

Hollywood people and their religions are all vagina bags, aren't they?

I love the last line. Sums up everything.

Be well, dear Bro. I miss your pottery, and so does the night when it decides that it wants to fall asleep watching pottery fly by the corner of it's eye in green, blues and choke faces.

I love you.
--TourGuide
 — unknown

i all religious vagina bags.

i think i used that line once.

smiley! you are hooray!
 — noodleman

aboli!

aboli!

dis suks rocks rocks and suks and big wazeebo in the wittle gazeebo

don't forget the reed nor the abbot
 — unknown

I read it not being here which approximately was enjoyed!

@!
 — unknown

I don't understand any of this.  I don't think that's my fault.  Sometimes poets enjoy being outside the comprehension of others.

So with this, I think.
 — Isabelle5

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