| paper cuts
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tragicbubble
| You asked me if I ever dream of you | 1 |
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but what am I supposed to say? | 2 |
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Yes, love, I dream of you: | 3 |
faintly, | 4 |
on the edges, | 5 |
like paper cut scars; | 6 |
slight memories of pain | 7 |
forever there. | 8 |
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I fear sometimes, without you, | 9 |
dreams wouldn't exist at all. | 10 |
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Should I say | 11 |
never do I dream, | 12 |
so never could leave | 13 |
no mark | 14 |
again tonight? | 15 |
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26 Jun 05 |
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wow. I absolutely love this. The sentiment of it is just so honest. I like the spaces in lines 10-17, they add to the dreaminess of that part. The last stanza is a little awkward, but you could easily fix that. Well done.
— Charlie
this is great!
— TPTNW
nicely observed
— opal
oh and forgot to say - papercuts hurt - a lot.
— opal
Quite lovely.
— unknown
beautiful
— ducktape
i like this.
a lot.
— listen
Hhhmmm. Nice. I relate withthis one very much! well written, nice form. The last line works very well. But I especially like 12-24.
— Riverwriter2
It's okay.
— unknown
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