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Skimming Stones
larrylark

Stone skimming
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is a matter of curves
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across the surface
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of a lake. Skip
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rather than flip;
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related to velocity
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and calmness of water.
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Flick a shiny pebble
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out over waves
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that hand it on,
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leaping from foaming tips,
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defying gravity;
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as meteors entering
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atmospheres
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at unexpected angles,
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catch light,
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thrown through a maze
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of cloud,cascade freely,
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vanish without trace.
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3 Jul 05

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this is very pretty.  i like it.  only it seemed to get off track when you started comparing it to meteors.  try adding more to it and close the poem with skipping rocks.  if you were doing that, then try explaining it more clearly.  this is such a pretty poem, i like it very much.  good jorb and keep on writing!  (;
 — ducktape

i agree 100% with ducktape.
this is really beautiful.
 — midare

haha. should've known, should've known.
 — midare

very pretty, i really like
 — tragicbubble

Dear ducktape

thanks for your good advice i will edit bearing them in mind
 — larrylark

Dear Midaire

Beautiful or not its only a mere draft on the sea shore
 — larrylark

Dear Tragibubble

Thanks
 — larrylark

L18 space between "cloud," and "cascade".

good.

rxs
 — unknown

Thanks rxs your insightful comments are much appreciated
 — larrylark

Really nice...you seem to almost capture the moments as the stone hits, then skips off into the distance.  Just what I have come to expect from you, larry...greatness.
 — SaleenDriva

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