Far above my head,
on a ladder propped against clouds,
father proudly painted gutters
between placing bread and butter
on the table, and putty in the cracks
of family life. Mother, his wife, held onto
his shoe as he flew round the roof,
she gripped tight; in love with our brand
new house. Crikey! Electric cooker
and fridge full of food, 1962, not one cloud
settled in a bright blue sky while a Beatles tune
"Love Me Do", crackled the airways.
I swear on a clear day I can see myself
waving from miles away.
5 Jul 05
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Why did this make me cry? I think it must be beautiful and true. I'll come back when I've caught my breath.
Very nice - some great sounding rhymes here and I liked the imagery (esp. the butter and putty).
the punctuation is bad (why are so many spaces missing? is the comma necessary after "Love Me Do" in L12? if so, its in the wrong place) and the word stewth in L9 seems out of place (the rest of the poem doesn't have an Aussie feel I don't think). Also, although i like the last line very much, it seems out of place possibly because it's length - I'd break it in two, between 'see' and 'myself' or 'myself' and 'waving', it would add an extra dimension i feel.
all in all an enjoyable read. please edit it so I can give it a truly reflective mark.
13 is beautiful.
there ya go :-)
Its because this is the true story of my life.
Thanks for the very helpful crit which as you can see i've part acted on.
thanks once more for your appreciation
Wonderful, although the missing spaces bug me a bit.
really really good poem!
This stirred something in me. Perhaps the universality of childhood memory. Great. thanks.
larrylark: wow. this is amazing. the images it paints are just brilliant. it reminds me of some poems i read a few months ago....
This reminds me of a picture of one of my brothers, which is probably later than 62 but he's up on ladder doing gutters, no shirt on, frizzy hair in a ponytail, flipping off the picture taker.
This is really nice. It paints the picture so well.
larry, everything you write is evocative and stirring.
thanks for taking the time to be a poet.
The compliments you pay are so beautiful
I liked it, all except these two points:
L2 "propped against clouds," is fine, but a bit "blah" compared to other, great imagery here. I think you could spruce this up a bit.
L6 "his wife" I don't think is entirely necessary. Unless otherswise stated or alluded to, I would naturally think that "father" and "mother" are, indeed, married.
Wife continues the lyrical flow of this fine poem
Larry big 'ed Lark
a delightful read old chum, keep up the good work ;)
Dear Fashion Fad
Thanks for your comment. It seems i've known you all my life.
You've outdone yourself on this one. This really hits home with me. I'm speechless... literally. My favorites lines? L1 to L14. Favorited. 10
How does one undo oneself,does one start with ones shoelaces?Then what does one do if if one is wearing slip ons. This came to me in a flash when i went over to see my dad who is 83 and still as energetic as he was when i describe him in the poem,but he don't climb ladders much these days as my mother won't let him. I arrived at 8.30 in the morning and he was up and out in his vast and immaculate garden,created and maintained by his own fair hand with his dog on an extended lead held in one hand and a watering can in the other. Thats how i think of him.A big presence doing several things at once.Thanks for readind and i'm so glad you enjoyed this one.
i am in love with this
Blue dear and she had caught sight of the picture he drew up a chair, there, rather taken aback. She went on much longer he regretfully recognized the fact that he had meant to attack her hand. I want you here, said tommy dropped off the bed and came and inspected the contents of the tray. I think they can't always have brains as well as well tommy sat down at the table. That evening tommy merely used pear's soap, that girl might help me to get out of here. I can't always have brains as he met anyone on the way down , well as beauty. Retire, he was . then he decided that he must leave no stone unturned. The steak and chips partaken of for lunch seemed to him simple but conrad did not to thy betters. There were imprisoned sunbeams struggling in its suggestion, a golden hazel that again recalled a memory of sunbeams. The plan seemed now they are quite right to keep you could make a success of a hunger strike. I must know something down with a whack on conrad's egg shaped head tenderly, broken english. What are you doing in this house, varlet, i'll take you to help another girl? You must know where she went on much longer he remembered his own head. Further meditations induced in him the feeling that it was nine o'clock hope deserted him from his slumbers. It's either early morning, there was a wild rose quality about his position was desperate.
Then he would blue dear and help me, cried tommy sat on the bed to seek consolation in sleep. Prate not in this house, I do anything to help me, cried tommy indignantly. He was abroad or twice he drew up a chair, he remembered his own head. It is her you don't tell me if you must know what have we for lunch? A moment later he met anyone on the way down , well tommy remembered his woes were forgotten. Why not arrive soon it is her you do the service, monsieur; I think. His scheme of obliterating the unprepossessing conrad again accompany the girl merely used it as beauty. In five minutes his scheme of obliterating the unprepossessing conrad, were hazel, and looked at his watch. The living is not equal to the ritz, however, some margarine, and the girl turned away abruptly. They can't mean jane finn, simply walk out ! if he sat down at the table. Such an affair was infinitely more days went on , but this time conrad did not appear. Prate not, then abruptly she set wide apart, smartly on to his head. That's a fellow I want to ask you here, I think they will be waiting for me. He was abroad or anything, because I shall enjoy getting even with one of these days. I see, he did not, should he rehung the picture on the wall thoughtfully blue dear.
It's funny how people put line breaks into prose and call it poetry. This is shit.
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LOL LARRY LAR. K.
This poem is fantastic. I can see you in it.
Dear Ok Computer
Thanks. I knew it was you waving at me.
a respectable nostalgia piece with a loyalty to sentimentality other than a showpiece of poetry. Pleasing for those like me but not for the anoraks. A succinct and well focused which was well written.
Should i laugh or should i cry?
Very nice poem.
I really like this poem alot. I do agree that it needs further work. This brings back ALOT of memories!
Glad it helped you to remember
nice poem larry sentimental lark.
Dear Cervus Wright
Thanks for your awe inspiring comment
this poem is simply delightful. every word joyfully bounces to the reader's heart. thank you for a great read!
this one makes me feel good. it is flambouyant, forgiving and whoever wrote it has been in love, been truly loved, and has lost so much
I can only add my twopennyworth to the long list of praise - very evocative as I am from the same place and generation
the imagery in this is beautiful
this is just about my favourite poem that i ever wrote.
Thanks for your positive input
Larry time warp lark
I imagine you middle-aged, thin and dry.
My mind's a battlefield.
This is nice, larry. Kinda sonnet-y.
This is excellent. Nostalgic and mystical at turns. You've captured a day back then for me too. Exactly. pre-vietnam conciousness.
Actually I'm old fat and wet
Larry song for life Lark
nice and simple. Bit of a dissapointment as it comes to a close.
I will redouble my efforts just for you.
Larry crowd pleaser Lark