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Printed Together

juxtaposed	1
with you is	2
where I want to be	3
two words on a page	4
proactive members	5
in the same sentence	6
forming an idea	7
together in print	8
You, the adjective	9
and I the noun	10
I'll let You modify me	11
period.	12

16 Apr 03

Rated 9 (7.1) by 4 users.

Active (4): 4, 6, 9, 9, 10, 10
Inactive (18): 2, 2, 5, 5, 5, 5, 6, 7, 7, 8, 8, 8, 9, 9, 9, 10

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Oh man, oh man, this is great. Cute (sorry, but it is) and simple. I read this slowly and saw 11 coming before it hit me -- and oh, how brilliant and satisfying. And it ends strongly, but I'm sure you knew that.
— unknown

swoon.
— username

i want to bring this back up because it is seriously incredibly cute.
— username

Original, creative, fun. GOOD Poetry!
— Isabelle5

Line 11:  I didn't understand the purpose of capitalizing "You".
Other than that.... this is a GREAT poem.
— aforbing

meh...
— unknown

I think it's an interesting idea, and you pulled it off well.  However, I'm not sure that I appreciate the style.  The enjambments were very strong though.
— TaylorC

this is a rare idea and executed flawlessly
— Minx

i like that last line.  that was cool.
— sassybnyss

Interesting...different...not sure I like it...i won't rate it yet just in case i like it later... ;)
— unknown

this is trite and silly not to mention the fact that 'juxtaposed' in no way connotates any kind of cooperation.
— hank

hahaha. so perfect. i love it.
— 8Gj00

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