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New Potatoes(1965)
larrylark

American boy stands centre of small holding,
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Hampshire England, bought by father,
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given to son - objecting to the draft.
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He sings, laughing, buries thin fingers,
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imitating toil, bringing soil stained new potatoes
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into the old world. Sir Walter Raleigh
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sails past bottom of plot, cursing bomber command
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as they fly in clusters, firing traces
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over rice fields of a distant land.
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29 Jul 05

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Lack of punctuation in places actually adds to the depth, I think.  It's breathy, like lack of oxygen high in the air as opposed to the ground and the old, family soil.
 — Isabelle5

I'll never get punctuation but then neither do a lot of published poets who have to have editors tooth comb their work but you are confusing me now,lack of punctuation makes it better.and i would never have made the oxygen connection.Thanks as always for your penetrative analysis.
 — larrylark

larrylark

it's good to lack punctuation?
 — Kauf

Probably not on a regular basis
 — larrylark

this sound as it is written from some sort of experience and seems to be exploring the tensions between the old and the new world, very striking imagery. A thought provoking poem, with effective use of historical character.
 — fashionfad

larrylark

It Isn't Entirely, then ;)
 — Kauf

The birth of potatoes.  NICE.

I love stuff like this.  9
 — themolly

I think its how you feel it but when feeling fly all over the place and appear as words on a page then they need punctuating or should that read puncturing
 — larrylark

I saw the first comments; your punctuation as alwasy, suck. :)
But I just want to say that the title and the last line stitch this up together quite nicely; good job.
 — unknown

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