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beautiful merman verse for cori
netskyIam

You men who go in boats to sea,
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To where are heard the siren calls
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Of mermaids, to their arms, enthralled...
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Heed not their swishy becks to ball
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-or-
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Sing-song po' in sauce results
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In meld of poet, fish, occult
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it has my luffly eyes
and her nose

3 Aug 05

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Net, is this your peace offering?

I actually like this.
 — themolly

Although, it doesn't appear to have a nose.  I have quite a noticable one....g-d-Shawnee/Pollock genetics!
 — themolly

Yes, I'm sure you know this is not very good, eh?

I wondered many times where was the punctuation and why ever line needed to start with a capitalization. I wondered, also, what means "enthalled."
 — unknown

spelling correction.. thanks
 — netskyIam

I put this new verse up at four boards today.  It goes to show how insidious is macular degeneration!  The pasted text in each board perpetuated the dropped "r".  I don't spell all words correctly, but -that- one I do know to spell.  I just don't know to see.  

And -yes-, molly, it's a peace offering for you, this verse, inverted syntax and all.  From an invert poet wannabe.
 — netskyIam

still like this one
 — themolly

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