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Saturday night (haiku-esque)
scottrs

Boys and their fast toys
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Young and old parked at Sonic
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Watch the girls flutter
 3

6 Aug 05

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Get rid of the saturday night and the parentheses....Haikuesque is a killer title.
 — themolly

i actually like this, you shouldnt put it down like that. thats like handing someone a gift and saying sorry its kind of a bad gift but i didnt care enough to get you something better.
 — unknown

Good. (10)
 — junky

thanks unk. and junky.  
 — scottrs

sonic is a burger place?  This is worth taking the "Not the greatest," thing off!

Have some confidence.
 — Isabelle5

this is sweet.  quite the awesome.  (;
 — ducktape

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