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I Was Fed Lies
EdwardDurden

The glare of the T.V. on her face
 1
was all I needed.
 2
She smiled, she knew I was looking.
 3
I went back to watching
 4
Gene play talk show host.
 5
She shifted, brushing back her hair with a little cough
 6
and evening the creases in her long skirt.
 7
A modest perfume brushed across my face.
 8
Taking another glance now.
 9
She was beauty
 10
dressed in Amish clothes.
 11
Her skirt long, crying out for Beatles music.
 12
Her shirt conservative, in every way,
 13
except for the air space inside.
 14
Her hair smelled of hard work and patience.
 15
And while I slipped a smile at her simplicity,
 16
what I felt inside took all my will to decipher.
 17
They say men are visual creatures.
 18
What we did that night had
 19
nothing to do with visual.
 20

23 Aug 05


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I think line 11 is meant to be 'Amish'.
 — unknown

line 16-a to I. ok.cool.
-mary.
 — unknown

Decifer = decipher
line 16 - what?  

I'll come back to this.  I see some problems.
 — Isabelle5

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 — EdwardDurden

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