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Chopping Board
larrylark

Old chopping board,
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chipped and splintered,
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hints at its own blueprint.
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Lintels of structure if prised
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reveal seeping spices,
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sweetened yeast,
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extract of peppers,
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smoky stains of ham.
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Lines mapping excavations
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through vertical diagrams
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of favoured meals,
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breathe beneath
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a sealed surface,
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released from confining pine,
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barely discerned among aromas
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of early morning coffee.
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4 Sep 05

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Dear Larry

Nice poem, but (and I'm trying to make a joke here or anything) it seems to sterile. If you get what I mean.
Buy a new chopping board - you'll get food poisoning if you keep using that one.
 — Lia

Oh, whoops, I meant I was NOT trying to make a joke.

I need sleep.
 — Lia

nice poem.
 — hank

yeah agree, nice poem! this is your 100th poem larry!! congratulations!!!
 — lonelygirl

Maybe lacks spark, but a nice read.
 — unknown

this had such a commonplace, mundane, homey feel to it...and i mean all of that as the highest possible compliment! you captured your subject wonderfully.
 — Catbox

larry, life must be stagnant to resort to writing about cutting boards. not one of your better works, but good none-the-less. now i'm hungry. thanks.
 — unknown

It is difficult to write a poem about a chopping board, but I think it's a potentially very rich vein oif subject matter. Metaphorically, it suggests layers of the past in the same way that a piece of a cliff reveals layers of different rock. In the same way that that rock reveals the earth's history, the chopping board is the key to the domestic history of a family - wespecially those great big butcher's blocks that last forever. I also think it's interesting for a male consciousness to tackle the metaphor of the domestic in a poem - it gives a new slant - in the same way that food cooked by a man has a different slant - usually burned if larry cooks it :)

Opal xx
 — unknown

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