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Crazy Once
themolly

I have rights that live in my mind.
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I ought to be able to move, right?
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I don't know if I am here or alive
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when it was all so black and white yesterday;
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padded stark white and tight tonight.
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Permanent bracelet of the tied,
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you are in the stocks for life.
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You're not ready for daylight.
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Stay put inside
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where it's ever-night.
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My bed and my sleepwear coffin uniform
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and I used to delight in that way
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at the end of the day
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it felt right.
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The normal average usual day
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is so far away from this.
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Padded blinding white windowless pod tonight.
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I don't know for sure if I am alive.
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If so I am, I'm waiting to die.
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Coffin uniform and permanent bracelets on tight.
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Crazy once, you're crazy for life.
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You don't deserve sunshine.
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Be satisfied to lie with the death fantasies and ill side effects.
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Live in your mind off of the pills and the liquids they give to you in spite of them.
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16 Sep 05

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I like this alot.  (9)
-Good Work!
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thankyou
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any suggestions?
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none....aeok
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huh?
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I feel like this needs work, but I can't see it.
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eh what?
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suggestions por favor!
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