| toes stuck in the sand.
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midare
| and it hurts | 1 |
like a photograph, baby, | 2 |
like a picture posed perfectly | 3 |
between my shoulder blades | 4 |
and the sunset waxing hazily | 5 |
in the background | 6 |
over a shore of sand | 7 |
and a tide that | 8 |
washes dreamily | 9 |
while i procrastinate | 10 |
leaving behind your memory | 11 |
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between rounds of | 12 |
drinking hopscotch and thinking | 13 |
that it sounds so nice | 14 |
when you say | 15 |
'i won't ever let go, no | 16 |
no never letting go | 17 |
of you--' | 18 |
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and then you fall flat | 19 |
between the number eight | 20 |
and the starlit serenade | 21 |
that comes when you put | 22 |
your foot down too hard | 23 |
on asphalt and you've got | 24 |
your toes stuck in the sand. | 25 |
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18 Sep 05 |
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wow
— sweetlemon
that was fast. ^^
thanks, sweetlemon.
grin.
midare
— midare
good good
— tragicbubble
jeeeeze lousie that was nice, better than beer or ice cream, or chocolate covered cheese cake bars that i love so fuckin badly.
— nullus
very simple and true. nice.
— themolly
thanks guys.
— midare
anyone else? :0
— midare
'between rounds of drinking hopscotch and thinking''-brilliant
— unknown
this just blows me away. amazing stuff. i want to read this over and over again. awesome job. wow!
— SweetPain
I think lines 8 and 9, 11 and 12 could be combined. Not sure about lines 24 and 25?
Enjoyed this thanks.
— WilliamGruff
wow-o
i really love it.
simple... yes complex. i love it all
— lilleifur
this is way to cute, makes me think of a little baby walking on the seashore, it get nicer and nicer as you read it over and over, so i thought does "toes stuck on the sand" means something like holding on to something?. this seem like a lovepoem.. hmm...
— inc_reign
waiting are you?
nice poem midare. can't be expecting nothing else from you though.
precious way of saying things in lines 17-19.
— unknown
ah this is brilliant. it almost sounds as if it would make a great song.
— sarahjoie
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