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Aimee
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Buried beneath | 2 |
second-hand rags, | 3 |
a cherub poses | 4 |
(before) a mirror, | 5 |
her tears invisible | 6 |
to the naked (I). | 7 |
She sees her future | 8 |
en(close)d in a | 9 |
gash, her fate fore- | 10 |
told within (the) | 11 |
yellow-blueness | 12 |
of her wounds. | 13 |
Gingerly, she lowers | 14 |
the (shutters.), | 15 |
lights a candle | 16 |
and melts herself | 17 |
into an ocean of | 18 |
cool, blue wax. | 19 |
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24 Sep 05 |
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is this about cutting or suicide? if it is, it's really powerful, if not, it's still pretty powerful, and beautiful as well. I like the last three lines especially, and the way you shoved (closed) into end. Sweet.
— Doulos
including abuse, right? yellow-blueness--bruised?
this is good. I like the last part--it is awesome and smooth. ~
L14--Gingerly (keep that there, nice unique word in there)
do you like e.e. cummings? this reminds me of the way he'd write poems.
— ducktape
liked the unique use of parenthesis. made this visually unsettling as well as . . . verbally? anyway, i like. is she burning herself into serenity?
— SteelAngel
thanks for the comments! if you look closely at the title and then the parenthesis, you'll see a hidden message. AiMEe
— unknown
awsome hidden message! ;p
— basketpacker
Very nice. I made one of these as well. They are not easy to make.
— DeathShards
Thanks. I edited it a little. AImee
— Aimee
Nice! I like it.
— unknown
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