| Jesus Christ and His Good Friend Lazarus
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bear
| Mourning at another funeral, | 1 |
looking at another grave stone, | 2 |
watching the free birds fly. | 3 |
I realized: | 4 |
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Death is not fair. | 5 |
But life is. | 6 |
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A needle in my vein, | 7 |
pumps me full of what I need | 8 |
to see the man that gives me | 9 |
the colors I want to | 10 |
get through the day. | 11 |
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Christ mourned for Lazarus | 12 |
He cried and felt pain, | 13 |
I can relate to that. | 14 |
But Christ raised his friend from | 15 |
the dead. | 16 |
That's not fair. | 17 |
But | 18 |
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Death is not fair. | 19 |
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30 Sep 05 |
Rated 7 (7.5) by 1 users.
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Inactive (3): 6, 7, 8, 9
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alright honestly, what the hell is up with giving me fives but not giving me a reason why I get a 5 it does not help me make the poem better. it would be much appreciated if you could tell me why I get a rating. thank you.
— bear
good idea, i dont think lines 7 - 11 go with the poem though
also i dont think that life is fair, there's too many variables, with death there's the absolute that you must die, which introduces uniformity and thus fairness to the event
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— Frozenstein
thanks a lot, lines 7-11 are open to interpretation.
— bear
i think lines 7-11 are the best bit. but they are not (in my opinion) relevent to the poem. maybe cut them, and use them in a new poem?
— Lia
I think they are relevent. I just liked the idea of a needle but not knowing what is in the needle. Maybe I will make a new poem. What to do, what to do?
— bear
Do you mean vein? In line 7
— Tentative
i guess
— bear
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