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This Is Not A Murder
larrylark

Far away peaks point like fingers,
 1
Sloping hill silhouettes three heads
 2
who listen intent as they stare
 3
into a bare room.
 4
The assassin steadies,
 5
leaning on a chair.
 6
A corpse, cold as marble,
 7
immobile and bare
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among the ruins
 9
of a broken love affair.
 10
 
 
Gramophone plays scarce remembered tunes,
 11
someone else's song.
 12
His home is a suitcase,
 13
'She owed me'
 14
Remains a problem?
 15
Stains on floorboards?
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Train appears on cue
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17 and a half minutes to 2,
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5 hours late.
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'It's fate'
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Seated in carriage,
 21
first class, lights pipe, meditates
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on the demise of his marriage,
 23
mais ceci n'est pas un pipe,
 24
et ce n'est pas un meurtre.
 25
A woman looks towards emerging stars,
 26
gripping the cold sill,
 27
her colour drains into the night
 28
as the sun sets
 29
behind a distant hill.
 30

1 Oct 05

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11. why not break before scarce?

poems on painters or paintings are my favourite.

thank you larry.

kaleidazcope
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Dear K.

Thanks for your kind comments. Maybe there should be a break after scarse or maybe not. I dunno, not sure.

Regards

Larry
 — larrylark

good, captures the painting very well
 — Leanan

Thanks Leanan

I see you are also a fan of Magritte.
 — larrylark

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