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Text Away VII
EdwardDurden

And as we stood in each others arms,
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I took a deep breath and whispered into her ear,
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deep inside her flowing hair,
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"My darling, with such a scent
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of coconut and lime, I could hold you forever..."
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8 Oct 05


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A conundrum.  

The first three lines are leading up to something, something, something, and then it's a Jamaican Corona advertisement.   Is this love, I ask?

A good scent is the basis of a strong future relationship, however.
 — cynthmala

its clark gable... in an ad for suntan lotion.  I really enjoyed this. its a great image.. even if my image is the wrong one, its great.
 — unknown

Hahaha.  Nice, unknown.
 — EdwardDurden

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 — EdwardDurden
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