| To My Brothers
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bear
| "Live Jesus" | 1 |
Those two words, | 2 |
uttered by the gentleman saint, | 3 |
has shaped the lives of thousands | 4 |
of men. | 5 |
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The stone on our rings | 6 |
is scarlet, | 7 |
the color of blood. | 8 |
But our tie will always | 9 |
go beyond that, | 10 |
deeper than blood. | 11 |
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We have gone into | 12 |
the bowels of hell | 13 |
and stared Lucifer | 14 |
in the eye. | 15 |
As we draped our | 16 |
arms around shoulders, | 17 |
watching burial cloths | 18 |
drape two caskets. | 19 |
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We have felt bliss | 20 |
and been higher | 21 |
than heaven itself. | 22 |
Watching each other succeed, | 23 |
winning state championships | 24 |
and academic awards. | 25 |
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A little longer boys, | 26 |
just a little longer, | 27 |
and we will join the ranks | 28 |
of those who have graduated. | 29 |
On that night there will be | 30 |
the uncertainty of | 31 |
the rest of our lives. | 32 |
But one thing is always certain: | 33 |
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Tenui Nec Dimitam | 34 |
I have taken hold | 35 |
and I will never let go. | 36 |
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8 Oct 05 |
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l26*longer
Very powerful poem for a ..sports team?
but yes.. very powerful.
— Cloudless
my school actually, it's an all boys school thats been around for 102 years and i'm a senior and we recieved our rings this past week.
— bear
well, hearing you had priests at your school explained why you write about jesus so much. i had a friend who loved jesus. i loved to talk to him. but i don't see him anymore, he doesn't go to my school
— Lia
I knew this was you bear (The ring thing gave it away :) ). Anyways I LOVE love love this poem, it's a favorite!
— Emilily
lia, yea theres preists and yes i have to take religion, but its not all that bad, i love my school soo much.
Emily! I am so glad you love this poem, this is the most heartfelt thing i have ever written and I am happy you felt that!
— bear
i didnt say it (you school/religion/etc) was bad at all. i didnt even read this poem yet, actually, but i will sometime. talking about Him is as vrey well and good, but trying to understand a topic on something i know nothing about is rather difficult. you should email me a crash course in jesus, but only if you want to, and could be bothered. if it's short, i will read it, and perhaps be converted :)
— Lia
slightly off the topic, did you write that last comment on emililiy's "the butcher shop", or was that some random unknown? i think i said a little bit too much, dont you?
— Lia
i will email u a crash course in jesus, he is actually a ver interesting person outside of being God. and uh that wasn't me haha, it was just someone being random and creepy.
— bear
oh, my. random creepy unknowns that aren't me scare me.
i am doing an extension history course, and it is about philosphy and truth, and we are doing a case study on jesus, whether he is a messiah or a figurehead. it should be interesting to find out more about him (i felt disrespectiful about not capitalising "him" but i hardly ever use capitals in comments)
— Lia
its quite alright i dont capitalize god a lot. i have a 6 page paper due tomorrw by three o clock, so i wont be able to do it tonight, but i will for sure!
— bear
4 comments from me, and i haven't even read the poem. i stil haven't read all of it. i like line 34, 35 and 36. but i think the and on the end of line 35 should be on the start of line 36.
— Lia
it just doenst seem to to coherent.....like you took two or three thoughts or poems and stuck them together..... the awards and championships really threw me off...i almost stopped reading it after that.....reword it maybe?
— activism87
Made the chang Lia :-)
It seems incoherent because I am trying to emcompass everything about my school in one poem. It is a bunch of different instances kind of thrown together, if you do not go to where I go, I think it would be kind of hard to understand.
— bear
ah, change*
— bear
thanks bear. i like the last stanza much better now. as for the rest of the poem, i still haven't read it. i'm so lazy, but you get that.
— Lia
haha yes i do, im getting to email you more about jesus, i really want you to understand!
— bear
this well written I really do envy you bear. I only wish that I could write have as well as you do. But htis poem deffently means alot considering I'm there seeing and living this with you. but also you should never forget which I'm sure you don't to LYLS, actually i'm in open so yea.
— freedaspace
thanks man, that means a lot. i have wasted many an open time on this site when i should have been doing work, i know how it is...
— bear
how random, i hit the random poem button and this came up...
— bear
Farting should be outlawed. The results are always nefarious.
— unknown
oh
— bear
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