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Patriot Killer
larrylark

Its easy,
 1
just flag 'em down,
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poor unsuspecting sods,
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dark road or shady lane
 4
on way out of town.
 5
He'll say, "Its the piston Mate."
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if he's a know all.
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Bonnet up,to late for him,
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or both if his tarts there.
 9
Bent over engine
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will it ,won't it start?
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Back end stuck in the air.
 12
Smash down monkey wrench,
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look on his face.
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"Smart arse," I'd scream.
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Seems like a dream.
 16
"Don't get clever with me."
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Lay him out in bushes
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or undergrowths screen,
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decent send off,
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Union Jack flag,
 21
thats what i wrap 'em in.
 22
Nom de plume?
 23
"The Patriot Killer,"
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thats me,thats my name,
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whistling on my way
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into work;
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ain't life insane?
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13 Oct 05

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This poem is insane.  It's too obscure for me this morning.
 — Isabelle5

I love it!
 — unknown

ugh... not painting a picture, nothing but no comment.
whats with your scheme. . .
 — Thenameless

ehh - its alright. not bad, but not good.
 — sk8rpoet55

sorry but you can do better, this is more like info material, poetry i see not, perhaps at the end of something much larger, and i dont think that minimalist can even begin to catagorize this....this is beyond minimal
 — activism87

shit i commented on the wrong poem....ignore me sorrya bout that one
 — unknown

A dramatic monologue and rather a good one.
 — unknown

5 do you need a the, or are you allergic. fine dropped elsewhere but here it feels needed.
7 know-it-all?
9 tart's

this is genius. watch out uk there is a new serial killer on the loose. i think you're suffering from fat-eyed interpretations.
 — kaleidazcope

Chill Isabelle

for everything comes to us if we wait but that does not include explanations. Many many people think and feel life as totally insane.

Larry
 — larrylark

Dera Unknown

I love youtoo. Can you feel it?
 — larrylark

cudos. this is unique
 — Trish77

Dear Trish

Glad you liked this one ,thanks for taking the trouble to read and reply

Larry
 — larrylark

Dear K.

My eyes are so fat i cry lard.

larry puff ball Lark
 — larrylark

it's "nom-de-plume" and not "non...."
is it not decency on line 20 ?
 — greenmantle

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