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Let It Flow
SweetPain

tempered time
 1
 
 
and living lies beseech me
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lost for words in this constant quickstep
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I trip to have you catch me
 4

30 Oct 05

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first line has way too many syllables. \the rest is very good.
 — unknown

weird i was thinking the same thing, with the too any syllables, thanks a bunch man.
 — SweetPain

like this version?
 — SweetPain

no more comments at'all?
 — SweetPain

last two lines are PERFECT. The first two could stand some improvement. I think you're a painfully sweet, sweetly painful candiful delicious little miss. Kiss
 — unknown

anonymously I fall in love with you.
 — unknown

aww thanks unknown, your so sweet *blushes*
 — SweetPain

this made me smile.
 — unknown

yay!
 — SweetPain

I love the last line.. " I trip to have you catch me"
 — rockchick

:)
 — SweetPain

a poem built for the last line, i enjoyed it :)
 — MCulyer

thanks :)
 — SweetPain
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