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I Will Always Remember
EdwardDurden

I will always remember that afternoon we spent together.
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Tired from a hot day at school, you entered my home with a relieved grin.
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We walked to my bed and I set my alarm.
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Lying together, I watched your shoulders rise and fall
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as you slept away your worries beside me
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and wished for things never to change.
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I kissed your cheek to rouse you
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since I had only pretended to set the alarm.
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You lay quietly under a thin layer of hair,
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which you brushed aside
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without even realizing how big your smile was.
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4 Nov 05

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 — stellarskys6

Not too wordy, not too vague.  This makes me smile in its warmth.
 — Aziel

Awww! This is very sweet!
 — ky_diva

Sweet innocent nap times.  I like the last line a lot.
 — Isabelle5

Pretty, not sexual, leaves the reader feeling that perhaps all they did was sleep. And I find that touching and sweet. I see so many poems in here about so many types of sex, which is OK within taste, but I don't sense that here. This is friendship, first love and perhaps even the trust of sleeping together without sex. Love what you did here!
 — wamblicante

Hi Great Poem Not only kidding yea it was heaps cool
 — unknown

beautiful
 — unknown

L7 killed it for me. either you mean it literally, but i already gathered that from the tone of the poem, or you meant it figuratively, which destroys that tone.

apart from that, this poem is truly lovely.
 — inutile

this is a very delicate poem between two sweethearts, i like it a lot... it reminds me of what i once had, a long passed memory fresh in my mind. -MONICA
 — unknown
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