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Living By Numbers
larrylark

Kept my birth tag,
 1
It's warm fur of belly button fuzz
 2
nuzzled at my name and number
 3
beneath ink that ran through
 4
Ribena stains.
 5
 
 
As young boy, train spotted,
 6
neat rows of figures stacked:
 7
the Glasgow Express -
 8
Empress of India, sailed across
 9
my page always on the rails.
 10
 
 
Calendars, clocks, timepiece,
 11
fob watch to slice and order
 12
gave sense to wayward days,
 13
working life spent packing
 14
nuts, bolts stacked faultlessly
 15
on trays in warehouse stores.
 16
 
 
Catalogued screws
 17
for fighter planes that soared
 18
through soaking skies.
 19
I wrote each number and name.
 20
 
 
Retirement spent logging
 21
the Heavens, each day noted
 22
since 1987, marvelled at the order
 23
of weather. People below it
 24
walking in rows picking precise
 25
paths through pre-ordained puddles.
 26

5 Nov 05

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this is quite lovely larrylark. i think in line 2 belly button should be two words though. i'm not sure, forgive me if it's supposed to be that way.
 — lonelygirl

Dear Lonely girl

thanks for your comment and picking up the error in line 2.

Larry
 — larrylark

i am always impressed/pleased/joyful with the product birthed from the literary womb of larry lark.

that being said, i think if you added more within otherstuffs and piled on top of tweeked points you could make this one a powerhouse.

i am unable to give you any specifics---as i would leave that to your won discression--preferrerrebbuly stanzas 2-4-5

but this an overall YES in an ocean of NO.
 — onklcrispy

Dear Onklecrispy

All my work is ongoing so i will obviously be redrafting this at some stage. I thank you for you sincerely kind comments which are warmly appreciated.

Larry
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