Comments:
Midare, this has a Tom Waits feel to it ... Good choice with "inebriated" and its less than subtle reference to the intoxication you refer to in the first part of the poem. I particularly like the way you juxtapose (or shall I say resolve) lines 5 and 6 to the ending. On that note, line 13 is brilliant and so very clever. Very good, I do not know why more people have not commented on this jewel.
Maria
— slancho
i like your poem
— bettalpha
COMMENT, THIS IS GOOD!
maria
— slancho
*grin* thanks, maria. the amount of comments doesn't really matter, as long as i get at least one great statement like yours.
smile.
midare
— midare
Yep, I know what you mean, the amount of baaad poems on PC does not matter either as long as there are poems like this one to re-read on a Monday morning. Thanks again for a wonderful read,
Maria
— slancho
I thought you had disappeared Midare, so nice to know you are still around. This is great work.
kitkat
— unknown
"Brouge"
— unknown
Love! 10!
— WordsAndMe
i like the energy in this. well crafted.
— listen
Back on a re-read. *happy sigh* This seems to perfectly and cleverly consume all of my saturday nights as a proud 17 year old. Hold his peice especially near and dear to my heart, Midare.
— WordsAndMe
thank you very much for your words, words.
midare
— midare
I love the kast 7 lines yet at the same time don't as they rmind me of all I missed trying to drown my fears of rejection in a mist of alcohol. This is indeed a jewel of a poem.
Larry sad man in the corner Lark
— larrylark
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