| of ghirardelli's and jimmy choos
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misspanda
| shoes, chocolate, and him | 1 |
[her pearl aphrodisiacs] | 2 |
and her best vices | 3 |
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13 Nov 05 |
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chocolate can be pronounced as two or three syllables. I think this is astonishingly great. The last line is perfect. "Best" is carried over tacitly after pearls, and associated cleverly with vices. A pearl of a haiku. something to fondle in one's mouth while sipping cocoa.
— graceinmtl
haha thank you!
— misspanda
I like it, although a small question - when writing a Haiku do we really need to add that in brackets after the title?
I've wrote 3 or 4 now and none of them have that in the title!! It seems like stating the obvious, you wouldn't put in brackets afterwards - (a Standard Poem) would you?
Maybe it's just me.
Good though all the same. I like the bitterness in him!!
— TheJediPimpz
haha good point.. :)
— misspanda
nice. i like this.
— listen
Glad to see you've changed it. :o)
Although you're not the only one that does it.
— TheJediPimpz
:)
— misspanda
MAN i WASNT MADE FOR THIS ..THESE POEMS JUS DNT GET IN MA HEAD BUT GURLS DO !
-BADBOI
— unknown
it seems someone is drunk with too much time on their hands!!! hmmm...
— TheJediPimpz
UMM YA i KNO UR MOM IS JEDPIMPZ
-BADBOI
— unknown
Badboi, shut the fuck up.
Thus spoke Rhein.
— Rhein
NAH RHIEN N U CANT FUCKIN MAKE ME
— unknown
-BADBOI FOR GOT TO LEAVE MA NAME DER
— unknown
NAH U UBER L33T OMGZ0RZ ORAL DEFECATION
shut the fuck up.
Thus spoke Rhein, again.
— Rhein
RHIEN WUT U GONA DO ??
-BADBOI
— unknown
uuuuuhhhhhhhh
— misspanda
annything else?
...not to beg....
— misspanda
:-D
— misspanda
I know where you're coming from panda, i've got about 7 or 8 poems with not one comment on them.....and I crave attention!!!
— TheJediPimpz
dug.
— onklcrispy
mmkay... i'm begging now...
— misspanda
sweeet.... i like it.
the use of pearl in the second line adds to the overall picture, nice work
:)
— unknown
nice work.
— varun
her pearl aphrodisiacs : )
my toes wiggle hi
— crepaway
:-)
— misspanda
lovely haiku, line 2 is great. you are quite a talented writer.
— lonelygirl
*smile*
thanks lonelygirl
:)
— misspanda
Hello Miss P,
Yes, I remember your confection poem. I loved it. I was your first commenator ( graceinmtl). But now I'm borntodance, so I'll have to re-ten you. I think we share the same fetishes.... at least two of them.
Grace
— borntodance
In my case, Miss P, it's shoes and chocolate in that order! "He" would take a distant 3rd!
Grace
— unknown
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