Comments:
Very slippery poem. I thought it was going to be a hallmark card and then you kicked me in the jimmy.
— INC8DYE
found this gem just in time for my tax refund! your other shit's pretty awesome too!
— unknown
they take and take and take and take and take...awesome poem
— unknown
it takes time to savor such a wonderful poem and boy, am I glad for it!
This can be read on some many levels, I almost regret the quasi-resolution at the end.
Your line breaks are quite effective, gasping for breath almost, turning my head in all directions. Going back to the last three lines, a wonderful play on meaning here, invoking a different protagonist, a sense of agency, almost a rhetoric, yet not as self-evident, opening up. Very well done
thank you
maria
— slancho
oh, this is starr, even better
I read something tonight by Ocatvio Paz, I will share it with you:
"language is poetry in a natural state. ... the word bread touched by the word sun, actually becomes a star; and the sun, in turn, becomes a luminous food."
Maria
— slancho
Maria! Thankyou!!! Happy Taxtime, as if low income status isn't taxing enough! Like I say to all my friends, "I'm low-income, but HIGH output!" God Bless (our wallets this very sombering time of the year) and God Bless you! Thanks again!
:-)
— starr
Maria, are you marief/tony or not? I am fond of lines 7 to 9, nice poem.
— unknown
no, Maria is "slancho" or, just Maria
— slancho
that's what I thought, good to know.
— unknown
gorgeous poem starr.
just don't want to acknowledge lines 10-12.
but i guess you made it political too... in human relations...
— syzygy
Excellent.
— Meredith
a big mis
take
— unknown
no need for a double
take
— unknown
mmmmm mmm
shit
take
mushrooms
— unknown
What It Takes
starr-ish
It takes miracles 1
It takes all you've got 2
It takes luck 3
And hope 4
more than you're 5
Willing to give 6
It 7
Takes 8
Time 9
The government knows 10
What it 11
Takes.
— unknown
CLASSIC!!! THIS IS THE TRUTH STARR!!!
— unknown
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