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"Come back with it or on it"
alana

Sunday brings a dull,
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Dead-ish, morning-after sort of feeling,
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Reaching and not grasping,
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Almost hypocritical because she's not glad she knows the truth now.
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I couldn't have felt sorry for her then,
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Sitting on the church steps in the damp
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Waiting for a ride home,
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And I wrote this down:
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"Waking up to rain
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Softer than snow,
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She realized she'd come to hold
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The eager eyes and tremulous breath
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Of a half-forgotten world."
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Brought back, hugging and healing
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Samaritan-like
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Since I myself am whole,
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And I'm smiling ruefully in the mirror,
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Not quite ready to curse hindsight,
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And my history teacher is telling me
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"We're not even coming back
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On it
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Because we died so badly
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Fighting for you."
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13 Nov 05

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I don't think I quite understand this one.
 — Cloudless

Oh, sorry. I should have explained. Ancient Greek women would tell their husbands when they went off to war to come back "with it or on it", meaning to come back with your shield (victorious) or on your shield (dead), and not come running home after surrenduring, in which case you wouldn't have your shield because they're too heavy to flee with. Anyway, in the battle of Thermopylae, all the Spartans got killed and were buried where they fell, meaning that they didn't come home with it or on it, because they didn't come home at all. The quote is directly from my history teacher who can quite often be veyr profound without knowing it.
This is also partly about a friend who received an unintentional rejection from another friend...
 — alana

This is pretty.

ps. my name is Alana.  :-)
 — likeavirus

a poem this cyptic cannot afford to get its pronouns wrong

get with it!

hip hup

one two one two one two!

left right left

Mellamovafanculo
 — unknown

plug into something radical?
 — Meep

it is veddy hot in dere

can you turn down da heat plese?

thank you veddy much

gupta
 — unknown

??? I didn't get my pronouns wrong. Maybe it just seems like it means something other than it means. Or something.
And thanks, Alana. My name isn't Alana, but it seems to fit anyhow...
 — alana

Line 4 - almost
Not sure what to think of this.  I want to like it but it's not that easy to read.  Thanks for the explanation of the title, that helped a little.  
 — Isabelle5

you're welcome.
 — alana

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