| four good words
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hank
| while i was waking | 1 |
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whispered | 2 |
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your bath is ready | 3 |
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18 Nov 05 |
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lovely, lovely, I might need to write this one on the bathroom mirror
Maria (slancho)
— unknown
which of these 12 words are the 4 good ones?
— marieF
i think you could venture a guess.
— hank
oh right yeah, it's gotta be the last 4! nice try at a poem
— marieF
thank you. i've read yours. sorry i haven't commented.
— hank
nice that you're giving [her] credit --->good<--- not very sentimental
nice this balances very well with whispered
at first read i read waking as walking because i have issues.
i like
cp
— unknown
do you need the that. it can be read without? said and whispered also introduce conflicting tones possibly?
it's really nice to have someone run a bath for you.
— bettalpha
thanks bettalpha
— hank
Yep, that's an improvement, but it's poor stuff. 'four good letters' and just a blank poem would have been ever so much better.
— unknown
the best kind of poems are ones like this: short.
it says a lot. good job.
— Xiada
beautiful. hello hank.
— varun
awwwww
— puddles
oh yes. i remember now.
— hank
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