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Can't Be Bothered
larrylark

He was there a moment ago,
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regaling the office,
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telling stale jokes.
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Sweating,complaining
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about pear shaped
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air conditioning.
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"Do you wish to reply sir?"
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"Can't be bothered to.
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Type anything,
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anything will do."
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He took a sip of luke warm tea,
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with a nip of whiskey neatly slipped,
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leapt over laptops,grabbed his Homburg
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hat,stood on his hands
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like a circus acrobat.Jumped out
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through the window clutching
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at thin air,plummeted down
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towards a concrete square.
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"Never moved so quick
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or showed such capability.
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I thought it was way beyond
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his limited ability" said  Mr. Pritchard
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by whom he was employed,as if
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the whole thing had been done
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simply  to annoy.
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Clerks stopped Shuffling,
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huffling and a puffling,
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bankers put their drafts
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and craftiness aside.
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All dashed to the window
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some even cried,
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like a communion of drinkers
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sharing sour wine.
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There he was
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three hundred feet down,
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an absolute winner
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a pirouetting clown,
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trampolining on the ground
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floor shop front awning,
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singing, somersaulting
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thousands were applauding.
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"Dark horse him," snorted Mr. P.
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"Next he'll want a pay rise,
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and a signing on fee."
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8 Dec 05

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great stuff!
 — unknown

Larry, you seem to be everywhere, you've just been the random poem twice in a row today.

please, please do me the favour of spacing after commas and full stops. you appear to do that sometimes, but not very often.
L11 lukewarm is one word
L26 please uncapitalise "shuffling"
L38 trampolining is not even a word, but i guess poetic liscencing allows it. it should be a word, though, it's a good one :P (same with "huffling" and "puffling" on line 27. actually, i'd make "a puffling" "a-puffling" or get rid of the "a" or something).

super poem, it kept me amused all the way to the end :)
 — inutile

Dear Unknown

I am most grateful for your positive comment.
 — larrylark

Dear Unitile

Happy New Year and thanks for commenting
 — larrylark

Give the man a raise. And move the canopy.
 — unknown

I don't know why but I am reminded of Flann O'Brien.

Great read
 — unknown

Nice one - it reminds me of a world I've fortunately been spared from these many years past
 — Markjdrews

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