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Prometheus and Me
bear

On the shampoo bottle
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it told me to:
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Wet my hair
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and then lather,
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rinse, repeat.
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I repeated until
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my hair shone
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and my fingers
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and toes were pruned.
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This must be
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how Prometheus felt
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while chained to that rock.
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24 Jan 06

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anyone?
 — bear

no one
 — unknown

o
 — bear

change the title
 — unknown

i changed it
 — bear

Probably nowhere near to the suffering of Promethus!
 — marieF

ah,thats the juxtapostion that i was looking for!
 — bear

Very clever!  You might want to say something to indicate you repeated the wash/rinse until the bottle was empty, only to realize you'd have to repeat it again tomorrow or something to show it was not a simple one-time event.

Short and sharp, the best kind.
 — Isabelle5

it's a bit classic.
 — unknown

thanks
 — bear

at first i was like, this is not doing prometheus justice. then i realised, hair is a bitch. though, i do think Prometheus did have a tad more of a painful experience. overall, to the point and funny. nice.
 — SweetPain

thank you thats the point
 — bear
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