poetry critical

online poetry workshop



Untitled indeed
ProzacNation

Eyes closed
 1
his face pressed on cold steel
 2
the metallic greasy taste in
 3
his mouth
 4
split lips
 5
dry swollen tongue
 6
 
 
flicker
 7
eyes squeeze tighter
 8
closed
 9
flourescent bulbs,
 10
clean, sterile
 11
antiseptic light
 12
hammer down on him
 13
 
 
his face shifts
 14
and hits the gritty brick wall
 15
a cracked groan escapes
 16
as blood wells on his teeth
 17
bruised, yellow, black, blue
 18
a multi-coloured punch bag
 19
 
 
dirt, and dried muck
 20
adorn his clothes
 21
and skin
 22
and he rolls onto his stomach
 23
 
 
throbing, pulsating head
 24
destroy all train of thought
 25
as once again
 26
he licks his lips with a parched tongue
 27
and dreams a dream
 28
of a new world
 29

can't think of a title for this one..

25 Jan 06

Rated 8 (8) by 1 users.
Active (1):
Inactive (0): 8

(define the words in this poem)
(22 more poems by this author)



Add A Comment:
Enter the following text to post as unknown: captcha

Comments:

"Dreaming a Dream"
 — Pegboy

very nice

idea for title:

i too attended dartmouth
 — unknown

don't get it? hopefully a joke... gah can't think clearly at the moment- my head is all fuzzy.
 — ProzacNation

lol. go unknown!
 — unknown

0.482s