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Junk Food?
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Brown rice
 1
Beans nuts
 2
Dried fruit
 3
Sore guts
 4
 
 
Burger chips
 5
Banana split
 6
Diet coke
 7
Great shit.
 8

29 Jan 06

Rated 8 (8) by 3 users.
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Hahaha great
 — gingerdave

beautifully said
 — ProzacNation

a brown boem
 — unknown

Ta folks.
 — unknown

OH, COME ON!!!!  This is a poem written for children under the age of 10 who are enchanted with anything 'potty.'
 — Isabelle5

That's funny!  I thought it was very true and pretty cute!
 — unknown

IT'S A POEM ABOUT SHIT!!!  What is noble or poetic about that?  
 — Isabelle5

Do you actually 'get' this poem?
 — unknown

New title.
 — unknown

hahaha. awesome.
 — sodapop

I wish da Isabelle womans would stop shouting
 — unknown

Heh! Even when she shouts, I'm always happy to have Isabelle commenting on my stuff.  She's got balls you know! Says what she feels and to heck.  I like that.

Thanks SP and unk for commenting.  
 — unknown

Great poem. No belly aching just the pure unadorned truth. I'm just off for my breakfast at Burger King
 — larrylark

Bun appetit, L.

;)
 — unknown

lol great. cute.
 — kfrivera

Okay, it's cute.  Crude but funny.
 — Isabelle5

fantastic! not that it is true on a deep lkevel, but on a taste level I can relate, wish there was a McDonalds next door!
 — themorrigan

Thks a lot folks.  Glad you got on board in the end, I. :)
 — unknown

One has to get one's body used to more expensive (often) and healthier fuel. Unless one has eaten it from birth, it requires humbling and careful listening in terms of what one purchases and eats together. Also, as most of us are of multiple ethnicities, we require fine-tuning due to that also. The digestive organisms have to be acquired and get right. Black beans have taken me years to handle well. Some things need to be carefully washed too. I eat salad and get that sometimes...basically most veges and fruits don't break down as completely. That's the fiber and/or "roughage" so one's insides may get discomforted and feces too soft, etc. Try eating the latter decribed above only and you would quickly have more than soreness, especially as you age. Obviously you respect the healthy prerogative- so don't give up. You can get good meat and that that's often cage-free etc, smoothies, healthier organic ice, rice, soy creams, etc. You'll notice the effects over time and the better karma. Please try not to cuss on a site devoted to good art. That's bad and doesn't respect enough what you put out.  -C
 — unknown

i love potty poems

love ,
little peetie potty plops
 — unknown

I LIKE IT VERY MUCHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
 — unknown

Push!  Push!  Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hhhhhhhhhhh...cute poem.  :-)
 — starr

Ur all faggots.... Lol Issabelle was probably the most Mature Person thats posted lol. like Seriously Brown rice beans nuts dried fruit sore guts burger chips banana slpit diet coke great shit. HAHA-not.. How pathetic can it get lol even u ppl who are probably even 20+yrs old are laughing at it.

Well keep it up guys-Thats my Entertainment for 2day
esparko@live.com.au
 — unknown

realy funny
 — marco

very idiotic n faltoo
 — unknown

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