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the way it's always been; too late.
pull_my_hair

let's be honest
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you've forgotten everything
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and i've surpassed subtlety
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hints at remembrance
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ended when country roads evolved as concrete
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and power lines collided with skyscrapers
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so,
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i will refresh your memory
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the past year scattered with vivid memories
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reminding you
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  that you're still a prayer inside a song
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  the need for beauty thriving in the gleam
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                of your eyes
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it was when our pulses first ticked simultaneously
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and i said,
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"if you try be less charming,
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i'll do my best to to be more attractive."
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and that's the way it's always been
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the start of inadequate
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  becoming complete
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among the situations
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for which i cannot express
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             there was this one
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and just so you know,
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the only reason i ran away
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was for you to come looking
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                              for me
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(and you did)
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but that holds no importance now
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the significance of an understatement
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erased by anniversaries,
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               sweaty palms,
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               and the adrenaline caused by
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love
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yet,
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no apology
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will ever substitute
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the breakdown of a soul
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crumbling as the months
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just pass the time away
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and i finally see what this all means
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but by the time i realized
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              you were far less of a romantic
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   and i was too late.
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29 Jan 06

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you would do well to remember, whores are only in it for the money. they dont care about you. the same goes for strippers, the waitresses at hooters, babysitters, sex hotline attendents, stewardesses or flightattendants, and sluts. yes there is a difference between sluts and whores. sluts have less deseases. trust me i know first hand.
 — TheO1dCrow

Wow! This sings.
 — gingerdave

this is an incredible poem.
 — unknown

ditto unknown, and haha to the diseased crow.
 — inutile

painful.  stunning.  well put.
fuck the old crow.
better yet-
don't.
 — chickie

this is an incredible poem.
 — unknown

yes

i concur

court adjourned for the journey

Fall Opium tube
 — unknown

this piece captured me entirely.

love, love, love it.
 — shakeit

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