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it's in line 4
IM in line 7, if it's intentional, would you explain why it's there? I'd muchly like to know.
— GalvanicGirl
i guess its kindof clever... you could work on it a lot and make it really clever though
— topop
i kind of want to italisize the i'm, but i have no idea how so i used caps.
hmmm i guess i could make it more clever, but thats as clever as i am.
— bear
i like this! if you were to drop 8-10, i'd like it even more, but you're right- everyone may very well hate the repetitiveness, and that makes ME smile:)
— chickie
oooooh. mehbeh try a less than sign and an i and greater than sign in front of the word, and the a less than sign and a forward slash and an i and a greater than sign right after it.
muahha. go ahead, try to decipher that.
— GalvanicGirl
L4 it's
L7 I'M and if you want to use italics, wite this: [i] i'm [/i] only replace the [ with
get it?
i do hate the repetiveness, so i guess you win.
oh, i just read galvanicgirl's comment, and realised she already told you how to do italics, but maybe my version is more understandable. but probably not. heh.
— inutile
oh, it didn't work. replace the [ with
if it doesn't work that time, and you still need help, there's a really good thread on the forum, go look for it.
— inutile
:)
thank you. much needed smile had the audacity to show when least expected.
— unknown
replace the []'s with the less than [ and more than symbols
— unknown
thanks for all the help! i am glad it made people smile! after all that was the point.
— bear
yay for the html!
and yay for the poem!
Yay!
— GalvanicGirl
yay 4 ducktape.
— unknown
I hope you don't bite the tongue that's in your cheek, you cheeky poet!
— Isabelle5
GalvanicGirl, hooray!
unknown, what's this about ducktape? is she back.
Isabelle, ill try really hard not to, but i do it all the time!
— bear
No ! Its OK
— larrylark
haha thanks larry!
— bear
almost made me smile. nice idea that needs to be perfected. but I like your style, bear.
— unknown
i guess it was okay - until the end
— unknown
All poems with too many I's get the number that looks the most like an I---> a 1. Rewrite with less I's and I'd consider changing my rating. See me after class.
— Henry
its fine u gave me a one. i like all the i's. otherwise i don't think the last stanza would work...
— bear
I see your point bear...7/10. I'm fair guy.
— Henry
thanks, i appreciate that.
— bear
Any relation to Rod Mc Kuen, Bear? I would just end it at L7. I wouldn't assume, though, that everyone that reads this will hate the repetitiveness. I, for one, don't.
I just don't like the last line in general. It comes off as sounding clunky and out of place. The repetitiveness didn't bother me at all. Very Rod McKuen-ish though. I like it.
— starr
i don't hate the repetition, only because it seems to be your destined response. but i like it anyway. it reads like a well thought out joke, but joke is such a bad word to use, embarrassing, really, because the complexity in this is there. joke is such a sham-name.
— listen
so much personality, too.
— listen
(smiling)
— unknown
im glad your smiling, kind unknown. that makes one of us.
— bear
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