| bleed this floor (for badger)
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wendz
| watched steve buscemi put on lipstick the other night, | 1 |
reminded me of another movie and his penchant for collecting | 2 |
records, weird things, and lost little girls with thick rimmed glasses. | 3 |
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badger my friend, you're way too old and | 4 |
pseudocharming for an enid like me - | 5 |
how in hell could we play out ghost world when we're both waiting for the same bus? | 6 |
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maybe we could be holden caulfield instead - | 7 |
dibs on the gray hair, you can have his wallet. | 8 |
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we could go skating on the pond, | 9 |
catch ducks and freeze fish, | 10 |
or just bus around town. | 11 |
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reckon that the lucky number seven on the melbourne tram line'd take us there - | 12 |
no right turns, if memory serves me correctly. | 13 |
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do you have a shotgun? | 14 |
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because you're me, thirteen years ago |
31 Jan 06 |
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the title and footnote and last line ruin this.
comments on the poem.
holden caulfield is one you are two.
why not bring in phoebe or one of the other characters in the novel?
i believe you should at least cap the names.
shame you can't work round the other I's especially as you've noticeably laboured not to use them at the start.
i almost really liked it.
kaleidazcope
— unknown
I love this because I hope I know who wrote it and if so, I'm feeling it with my heart.
Well, either way, I'm feeling it with my heart.
— Isabelle5
I haven't felt a need to log in here for a long time, but a friend told me this was posted. I must, must must know who wrote this. I have my suspicions but being the Steve Buscemi i am, need to know for certain.
— badger
I love the flow of this and its intense lyrical quality
— larrylark
Heya kal. You're right about the footnote and title - footnote's been changed, but the title is important. It's name of a crazy Euro sounding technopop song starring the wonderful badger himself, so it holds extra meaning on a personal level. I am scared of caps, but I think that I will try my next one with caps and rhyme. I can't use any of the other characters, because none of them are Holden, and in this, we're both Holdens. I'm glad you almost really liked it, it's one of the most encouraging things that I've heard/read lately. Thank you for your comments :)
Isabelle, I'm glad you feel this, too. Who did you think wrote it?
badger - you Steve Buscemi, you. Lipstick in your spare time ;)
larry - *blows raspberry and sings*
— unknown
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