| Things in the Mirror are Closer than They Appear
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Isabelle5
| I was running late, | 1 |
just fastening my Maidenform | 2 |
(hard to do since I got these acrylics), | 3 |
when my boyfriend | 4 |
called to ask, | 5 |
“What’s the difference | 6 |
between illusion and delusion?” | 7 |
“I have no idea,” I said, | 8 |
brushing on blush. | 9 |
“I’ll think about it and | 10 |
tell you tonight.” | 11 |
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We hung up, I slapped on | 12 |
a coat of mascara, | 13 |
grabbed my keys | 14 |
and headed out. | 15 |
Glancing in my rearview mirror, | 16 |
I thought I looked pretty hot. | 17 |
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I thought about the question - | 18 |
I could nearly taste the answer | 19 |
on the tip of my mint-flavored tongue, | 20 |
just beneath my rose-colored lip gloss. | 21 |
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1 Feb 06 |
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ha! love it.
Sometimes that's me.
Okay,
A lot of the time that's me
-galv
— unknown
why post such a banal poem at this critical moment?
— unknown
Thanks. There is such a fine line between illusion and delusion - which applies to us? Depends on the mirror..
— unknown
Define banal and then define illusion vs delusion.
— unknown
And exactly what critical moment is this?
— unknown
I don't care what other people say (well, I generally don't) but I wanted to tell you I enjoyed this a lot. The direct quotations are quite effective, I could see myself going through the motions (that is not the reason why I like this, it does not have to have an agency I identify with). I like the question you chose to pose, rather, that he asked. "brushing on blush" has to my favorite in the whole poem, it read very well after what preceded it, a rhythmic coincidence, an exhale. Well done.
This is open ended, I suppose some people might say that you are lacking a resolution. I find it ties quite nicely with the rest of the poem, the answers in the mirror closer than they appear, just on the tip of your tongue, "beneath my rose-colored lips" - yet not quite there. Your are posing a couple of other questions with the ending, at least I read it like that. I find it quite clever.
Well done, thank you. yeah, I really like this, the voice, the choice of words, the line breaks, the poems itself almost out of breath, mid-step ...
Thank you for the taste
Maria
— slancho
agree with one of the unknowns, it depends on the mirror
Maria
— slancho
Isabelle?
— unknown
Maria, I was going for the irony, the woman creating an illusion and her seeing herself as hot being the mental mirrors delusion. I really had fun with this poem, the light fluffy aspect that really does have an interesting question. Rose-colored leaped out at me as soon as I thought of it, even though it was not the color I first had in mind.
I'm so glad you like it. Hope all is well, Lady.
— unknown
I could add "mint-flavored" before tongue but I don't want to drown it in overkill!
— unknown
Who calls for her?
— Isabelle5
who wrote this, damn it?
I can guess but I know I am going to be wrong
Maria
— slancho
mint-flavored tongue, wait, I need to hold on tighter to the chair ... pfuuu
you are right, it might be overkill ... strangely enough, I am having mint tea right now
thanks again for this, loverly, whoever you are
maria
— slancho
wow, theres a lot to think about here... nice work
— dmartin
okay..... gender detector revving..... It's got to be a guy because seriously who slaps on a coat of mascara?
— borntodance
Every woman I know slaps on mascara (with her mouth hanging open) once she's been wearing it a few years.
— unknown
really? Slap is broad-stroked. I don't see how mascara wands allow for that. I put the stuff on almost every day, and never have I slapped it on. It's not like painting a wall.
— borntodance
This is a poem, remember? It's not necessarily the way every single woman in the world does things.
Personally, I do slap mine on. Curl my eyelashes, use that brush like whitewashing a fence and I am done. Who has time to do it one lash at a time?
— unknown
sighs. I'm not going to battle over mascara application, unknown. If the fence-effect is what you're after; good on you. It was just a detail I used to suggest that the author is most likely male. If I'm wrong about that, I can live with it. If you'd like proper instructions on how to apply mascara optimally, you can e-mail me.
— borntodance
Mascara has nothing to do with this. The word slap fits the poem, that's all. This is not a beauty class and no, I need no help with putting my illusions on each day, thanks. lol
— unknown
I still can't find the difference. The individual will have a different oppinion compared to the mirror. Its just as complex as the chicken and egg question.
Personally I sit on the fence. Great poem, makes me think hard!
— kingcrossy
Delusion and Illusion - to me, best defined by a retired actress still dressed in bows and lace, with thick make-up and a sexy demeanor, thinking all men find her irrestistable. To those outside, the delusion of youth is appartent. To the woman herself, she wears and believes the illusion she lives in.
Does that not come through here? We put on a face each day, what I call putting on my illusions. It's only those looking at me who will find that the illusion works or if I am delusion in believing it does.
Sort of the same fine line between priceless and worthless - if you stop to really think about those.
This poem is just for fun. Slap on your face any old way at all, but get it on before someone sees the real you, if you dare!
— unknown
It always interests me how poems are received and understood. Thanks to all who liked this and appreciated the question of delusion vs illusion. So close but so different, depending on if you are the wearer or the wearee, so to speak.
— Isabelle5
Doesn't anyone want to comment on delusion vs illusion?
— Isabelle5
Clever stuff
— gingerdave
I knew this was Isabelle.
— unknown
What gave me away? Seriously, I would like to know.
— Isabelle5
Certain phrasing, the lip-gloss, the maiden-form and the construction, you use a predictable construction or structure if you prefer, and of course theme.
— unknown
Amazing. I don't really wear Maidenform or have acrylics so this isn't about me at all. Not real life, I mean.
— Isabelle5
You just have a recognizable style. It's a good thing!
— unknown
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