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starin' at the world through my rearview
wendz

that's what i've been doing for so long,
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just staring at the world through my rear view
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only this time it's raining
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and i know that i can stop
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the sky weeping,
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but i don't know how.
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look for me when i dream, my friend;
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you're the only one who can save me.
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read my mind, tell me what to do
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coz i know that there's a whole new world
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which doesn't belong to me, yet -
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i want to see what you see,
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feel what you feel..
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that night we kicked back and
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put our feet up, watching the clouds pass by
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through your sunroof, the warm night,
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lightless but brighter than any day -
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i almost thought that it'd never end,
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just you and i,
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flying over a cliff,
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smiling at each other
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telepathically.
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lucky is in use, that's why

2 Feb 06


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this is nice
 — starwars

"i know that i can stop
the sky weeping,
but i don't know how."

Love this.
 — FailuresArt

the title caught my eye. I like the the idea of the rearview mirror. I do wish you referred to it again or expanded upon that, especially in the end. Just because I want to hear more about that.
 — cuishanying
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