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Advice from the grave
unknown

My gravestone will simply say
 1
"you die forever so live for today".
 2
 
 
My gravestone will be overgrown
 3
by nettles and blades like lovers sewn.
 4
 
 
Noone will stop and sit at my grave
 5
and pray to God for my soul to save.
 6
 
 
When I was alive I walked by the sea
 7
to stare at something deeper than me.
 8
 
 
When I was alive I never feared death
 9
In winter I saw how God took my breath.
 10
 
 
I lived and died alone
 11
From dust to flesh to headstone.
 12
 
 
I have chosen not to be reborn
 13
But to be the song of sparrows at morn.
 14
 
 
Love is like an injured bird
 15
it sings before it dies unheard.
 16
 
 
Dont look at my life as if i was taken
 17
look at my death like i had awakened.
 18
 
 
If you live each day as your last
 19
your tomorrow will be a sorrow free past.
 20

3 Feb 06

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fwank you for your adwise

i fink it wevy good

i wike your rime

omg

woger
 — unknown

no fwank you

i fink it wery bad

i do not wike your rime

woger
 — unknown

oh

i ave a sooter?

are you a wabbit too?

will you be my miwar?

woger (1)
 — unknown

ho

u ave a snifter?

are you a ware wabbit too?

will you be my rimmer?

wogering woger (1)
 — unknown

yes woger

i am a bear wabbit

will be your wimma wheneva you want

ow many centimweters of ears do you ave?

and: do you celebwate wamadan?

woger
 — unknown

i celebwate wigwams woger woger hairy todger
 — unknown

i celebwate wigwams ***

wew, my new found wabbit, wis is wevy good news indeed

we must wift several cups then togeda

i haft to go now. i have weal work to do

kisses on your tuft

woger won
 — unknown

Forgive this lame-ass person who is posting lame ass comments all over.

This is rather Hallmarkish, something I'd like to find on a sympathy card.  You might want to make each sentence begin with a cap and end with a period.  Pretty it up a bit.   Line 11 is out of step with the rest of the cadence.  

I like the sentiments.
 — Isabelle5

This is fine..I'll give it 9 (grin)
 — gingerdave

as redundant as it may sound line 11 reads better as "I lived my life , and died alone."
but other than that faultless 9 stars *********
 — turtlepoet

this is beautifully written! love the attitude, the image of love is very good but rather negative, maybe you  should change it a bit, say a certain type of love or the love you had, becasue there is a healthy attitude to death here, that doesn't seem reflected. it is a beautiful image though, so maybe just leave it.
 — themorrigan

i like the way you've done the stanzas. they fall into the next, the next. second to last stanza is my favorite.
 — listen

Ghosts are a windy bunch: They say nothing
in so many words.
 — unknown
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