| Motherhood by a Slightly Open Window
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Isabelle5
| The milk in her tea swirled | 1 |
lusciously in lazy circles of crème and tan, | 2 |
the silver of the spoon echoing | 3 |
the silver ring on her slender finger. | 4 |
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The curtains shuddered in a crisp | 5 |
white-lace Winter exhalation, | 6 |
bending backs of pines | 7 |
heavy with shawls of snow, | 8 |
causing tiny sparks to hiss and fly. | 9 |
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Her baby nuzzled against rich crimson velvet, | 10 |
clever hidden panel opening for her tiny pink lips; | 11 |
she opened her mouth, | 12 |
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suckling pink | 13 |
and crème | 14 |
and tan | 15 |
as the milk swirled. | 16 |
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3 Feb 06 |
Rated 9 (8.8) by 2 users.
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This is very descriptive - there is so much in this - I like. Line 5 and 6 are really good. Interesting idea.
R
— Rousseau
I'm trying to convey the connections that the baby and mother have through color (pink skin, creme of the milk and the best, tan tea and aureole). The lovely bond that is a circle swirling through life.
— unknown
i like your poem. i see and feel.
— bettalpha
I see what you mean.like I said, very interesting. I do like the idea behind this.
Nice one unknown.
R
— Rousseau
Thank you. Now go read I'd suck my cheeks in and laugh like a loon!
— unknown
I like!
I like the other as well. I am with A, tho...not so much the last line, but I understand what you mean.
— unknown
Not so much the last line of this? Not sure what you mean exactly.
— unknown
no, the other.
— unknown
Oh, the other poet's poem? Yes, it's so funny! I thought guffaw fits the ending he put to it.
— unknown
Incredibly brilliant.
— gingerdave
another eye-popping two-loner by Gingerdave. Bravo, GD!
— unknown
the word choice is wonderful. you get it by the end. its an enjoyable piece of writing.
— listen
oooooooooooooooooooooooooh!
wuverly
woger
— unknown
Thank your for the comments. This is dedicated to my lovely daughters and their babies.
— Isabelle5
bravo...
— Trish77
I should have known...sorry Isabelle, I was just reading random poems and as soon as I got to this your name whispered in my head. As I started reading the comments, the voice in my head was confirmed. I know this isn't very new but this is amazing as always. If I may be so bold, you have a fan.
— unknown
Thank you for that, it is much appreciated!
— Isabelle5
Anything for such an amazing poet.
— unknown
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