| I Kissed You Four Times Last Night
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HandsomeHerb
| Twice you were my hand, | 1 |
once my stuffed bear, | 2 |
then finally my pillow. | 3 |
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And I sank into you | 4 |
and sighed, | 5 |
knowing that the warmth I felt | 6 |
was not you, | 7 |
but my own breath | 8 |
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gathering on a pillow case | 9 |
that you will never touch. | 10 |
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6 Feb 06 |
Rated 7.8 (8.2) by 7 users.
Active (7): 5, 6, 6, 6, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10
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I LOVE THIS IT"S AMAZING>>>AND YOU"RE LOVESICK
— turtlepoet
I agree with turtlepoet, this is sensual in a wonderfully crafted way, the reference to absence evoked by present things ... the pillow, your hands, the warmth of breath - all things one would associate with a lover, how you have woven them up within a sense of nostalgia, yet one that is so tangible, yet not overly dramatized
I really like this,
thank you
maria
— slancho
Oh, sad! And funny! Who among us can not relate to this? Even my 4 yr old grand-daughter was caught kissing a spot on the wall one day. When confronted, she said she was practicing for when she has a boyfriend and mates! (They had gotten bunnies!)
— Isabelle5
Like grandmother, like granddaughter. *wink*
— unknown
this is really shweet. grizzate job!
— jittery
I love this :)
— sweetlemon
the ending falls short..
— unknown
this is wonderful. especially love the second stanza.
— starshade
um...creepy?
— unknown
that has got to be
one of the sweetest things
i've ever had the pleasure
of reading.
it's good to see some good poetry.
i've found some pretty baaad shit on here.
glad to know people CAN actually write. =p
— colormetink
is it ok to jill off yet?
— unknown
Simpel and sad. I just love it!
— tiny
silly! silly! silly!
— unknown
oh.....
wow.
10.
— misspanda
I love the first stanza and first line especially
— lai
sexy but sad...been there, done that. yeah, it hurts, but sometimes the most painful instances in life make the greatest poems. you've succeeded and you'll be okay...i give it a "10" cuz it made me gasp at the end.
— starr
oh, this is marvelous
— cockroachthe
I think it's immature in action, and the writing is far overrated.
— Cloudless
I'm not feeling the love. There is nothing really special about the content or the style of it. This is very boring to me.
— Charlie
Have to agree with the last two
— unknown
weak
— fallinforyou
I think the affection you feel could be displayed much nicer.
— fallinforyou
I think it's elegant in it's simplicity.
— mmmkay
haha- yes
— onestepshort
Depressing but beautiful
— MissMay
I like the line, "I sank into you". A delicate sexual reference
— scarlet_muse
ewww you stalker
— unknown
i get it. its about how the mafia uses people for favors and then after a while, they shoot them in the back of the head. i wanna be that guy, the hitman.
— TheO1dCrow
the last 2 lines are very good.
— 5foot3
I agree with slancho. This poem is specific. T S Eliot called it the "objective correlative" meaning that if you want to produce emotion in your readers give them something to be emotional about. This woman (has to be a woman hasn't it?) charms us with her nostalgic kissing of handy objects. She is being herself and we share her moment.
— mcverse
Practice makes perfect! Well done.
— marionette
This is very creepy, but that doesn't take away from the fact that it's a boring poem.
-ramher
— unknown
i think they reason this is so lovely is beacause it's relateable. every one at one time or another has pretended they're with that far away god/goddess. very well done.
— splitends
Oh, random! Still good...
— Isabelle5
I love it, the imagery of a lone body is perfect! Very moving
— unknown
wow this is good. definitely know where you're coming from. Beautiful... don't fix anything.
— OwlGirl
A stunning read, and yup, I can relate to this :p
I like how you made this a rather sad poem, even though the title and the first stanza on their own make it seem like a happy one.
— Enimie
whatever happened to
on your forehead
on your lips
on your tummy
and in my dreams
— unknown
Simply delicious, Herb. A poem for everyone. Well done.
— unknown
ABSOLUTELY AMAZING
the last two lines make me wanna read it
over and over and over in the hope that your
kissing partner will be intrduced,
for your sake and my sanity
— lets-t
lovely and sad unrequited desire..
a moment i fear we may all have experienced
nicely written
— Mongrol
exquisitely transcendental.
-DL.
— unknown
A gem of feelings. Simple meaningful poetry, so easy to read so hard to do.
— cowork
oh yes this is a reflective gem - in this longing way you keep the Heart juicy everyday - LoveLy writing and simply writ with charm and heart writ inside of it
— AlchemiA
oh, it's so sad that so many people can relate to this.
and wow it's 2 years old, hope you've recovered.
— photobooth
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