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melted esoterica of the geniuses (sponsored by Heinz 57 sauce and Heinz 57 sauce)
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beneath soggy stars tucked away miles below the earths terra firma, therein rests the sphere of insanity, haunted by the ghost of Buddy Hacketts saturated arm, who uses his factory fresh psychedelic papah’ towels to clean up the excess diet pepsi and blueberry snop to the smashed disco hit “Get Down With the Genie”
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within the amphitheater, an elderly brotherhood of ancient alcoholic superheroes, preposterous wizards, neurotic otherworldly savants, and undulating majestic lunatics preside over a hovering, pulsing, gleaming, fibonaccical, self-recursioning sided die vaguely comparable to OSErr, 299458
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absorbed in a cosmic reunion they lurch around the gelatinous orb like paroxysmal crabs, shooting spores from their anuses, they are amphibious evolutionary calamities, jumper cabled to atomic car batteries, synergistic with Ghost Mutts wool hat, fastened to Apache Chiefs nipples,behold as the hannah barbarians engage in their obnoxiousness orgy twitching like incestuous attention deficit druids
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betrothed in ceaseless dissertations and dissections of the folklore of Pispania, rigatoni, and the cult of melted ear children, a veritable vomitorium of supernatural buffoonery and eloquent nonsense, a gurgling collage of incoherent “and I’s!”, “erdoh’s!” and “kakoooon’s!” all eschewed and chewed and spewed into one another’s official Keith Van Voax/Destephano commemorative dune buggy lunchbox, for later inspection by Mrs. Fine
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quacks of glee reverberate from one non-existent  corner of the bubble to the other, whilst the numinous squadron views video documentation of their bygone, ghoulish simian antics collected by Green Yamo, resulting in the authentic versions of (x)themselves to marinate, season, and consume the transposed, abstract, fictionalized versions of (y)their duplicate*…and pineapple yogurt
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engaged in jerky, festive ephemeral dances, that rival the moves of Fred “Rerun” Berry, in exaltation of all that is perplexing, irrational, enigmatical and obscene, this clan of camarilla are the ugliest of imbeciles, and the most stunning of geniuses, who are better than you as they (disguised as pig-monsters and tangled up in marionettes) drive a luminous radioactive 1977 Monte Carlo through every fissure in space and time, proving once again that this shirt is orange
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very simply vey and huma
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*recipe can be obtained through Edible Ghost Enterprises, extension #299458.1, ask for Faub
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based on actual events that have quite possibly taken place in the future and/or past(edited slightly 8/28/03 and/or 13/72/01)..and inverted pineapple yogurt

5 Aug 03

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Outstandingly organized, and a creative freestyle form. Great.
 — RSpiers1

Feels like carroll, adams, and ginsberg all rolled together. This aches to be read aloud.
 — Ananke

One of the best writers on this site. You've done it again.
 — unknown

Though I know it isn't your style, at all...I really feel that if you committed yourself to a more coherent form of poetry, you'd be a lot stronger as a writer. You are really good at creating strong imagery, and are also good about stringing words together that complement each other, but every time I read one of your poems, my heart sags about how impenetrable they are. You are clearly in love with words, which is the highest complement I could pay you as a writer.
 — ersaph

kakooons!
 — unknown

A cmplete yawn
 — unknown

i "cmpletely" disagree.
 — unknown

coooool
 — bttrswtd

You make me sick! But in such a brilliant way... Love the vicious, unrelelnting flow of ideas. I envy you, you bastard! great stuff. AGAIN!
 — badger

I like these, but the simian among us may have trouble sticking with it until the end. I love your image and language, though. You might try resequencing these to be less temporal, letting our minds to that part of the work. Line 2 is your weakest. You could try upping its interest level by providing more sensual experiences.

-zep
 — zepplin42

Van Voax is now officially on Google
 — unknown

Insanely breathtaking.
 — unknown

i have feeling-ling
 — unknown

dude...voax
 — unknown

eat a flower when you err
 — unknown

i nevah po'k!
 — unknown

subotai!
 — unknown

deeeeeeeeeevious (and nasty)
 — unknown

verily
 — unknown

what? no bryan brook references?
 — unknown

roy-ification
 — unknown

ronald mcDOH
 — unknown

sincerely,

jane and micheal banks
 — unknown

spramfptklins
 — unknown

bill cosby is black
 — unknown

without dental
 — unknown

I NEVER ATE A GHOST I DIDN'T LIKE
 — chuckle_s

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