|Philosophies in Dreamscape
A butterfly may flap and does
—or doesn't insect butter fly?
We've never seen real butter fly
yet all have seen a butter stick
unstick a cast iron frying pan.
A flying buttered cast iron pan
slipped out the window Flap
and Flip it fluttered round
whilst the man Carpe Diem
dreamed of hot pancakes and ham
—for children starved in Karmadam—
a flying buttered cast iron pan
slipped in their window Flap
and Flip it fluttered round
until alas Carpe Diem
awoke and fed nothing to them.
12 Feb 06
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your poems make me feel stupid.
I am not bright (118)
I am merely old (51)
Life is a teacher, makes us seem wiser.
In a sense, we do get smarter just by living
and thinking about things we have not done well in the past.
thanks for your kind commment but you are not stupid
nor should you put yourself down. If I knew your name I'd
elevate you in a personal poem gift just for you.
my name is Morchuis
Very good poem.
"your poems make me feel stupid"
Your grace allows life. I'll return your gift.
"your poems make me feel"
Your reading proves wisdom
is gained by the reading
of words (such as yours).
"your poems make"
Such observation, cut to the quick,
proves that you, also,
create more than zip.
this floats my boat.
Line 3/4: A little weak, but I love the context.
" 'round" (8): Don't be afraid of the letter "a". It will love you if you love it back.
Line 11 - 16: Hm. Wow.
i love your poem.
i love your title.
mousie: I tink your're right about that "'round". I've made it around and put " =A= while" on the next line . A fine help. Sounds better. Here, cheese, smile, hugs, reid.
revised title and some wordings and the strophe spacings
since you deleted "a while" (i never read it with, but i'm going from your comment), you could change "round" to "around" now.
Thinking of publishing. Is it OK now? (fresh and perhaps final retouches)
thanks poet-peers, reid
This is my fav (so far) of all your poems reid. Well written, did you publish it?
No nits here. Beautiful is overused...sorry.
On closer read--cause I loves it so:
while a man, Carpe Diem,
I think would stand better on its own.
o my goodness. I refloated this last night because I had published it to
and I thought to ask you all for a reassessment.
Thanks very much
from this monkey very busy at its typewriter
(eventually something intelligible results, heh).
-so, thanks thanks thanks
(btw, Wikiepedia is for everybody)
I'm reminded here of Peter Piper picking pecks of pickled peppers in Ogden Nash's Private Dining Room with Miss Rafferty wearing taffeta and Miss Cavendish wearing lavendar and breaking the candleabra...strangely, those made more sense to me than this poem.
i get whimsy with irony, seize the day indeed ya can't seize anything if one's too hung up on the need to eat pancakes. i'll try and seize the moment's reflection that this fine poem created
very clever... well done. i enjoyed it. such a wonderful title!!!!
Stay away from the pot. This is okay but lacks experientialness. Is that a word?
not a word
and the crit is a puzzler as well.
How great! Reminds me of Alice in Wonderland...I think Alice questioned butter and flys...as well as horseflys (horses and flys). Great poem. A lot of fun. Waht is carpe diem though? I know the phrase, but how does it fit here?
FrChris, I apologize for not responding to your question of probably long ago.
carpe diem is a catchphrase associated with Epicure's philosophy.
It means literally, to sieze or catch the moment; the day.
Raised for bettalpha
i love this poem
thank you nets
i wonder how i missed it
as it's still in my favourites too
I forgot to thank you
for keeping my spirit alive.
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