| The Night the Fat Lady Sang
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Isabelle5
| The last dance is over, | 1 |
the shuffling of shoes | 2 |
toward the door | 3 |
(and hopeful lusty dreams) begun - | 4 |
Lord, what lungs the fat lady had tonight! | 5 |
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We find our coats, | 6 |
pull them on one arm at a time, | 7 |
while you croon to the beat of the clean-up crew. | 8 |
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I reach for your hand, wishing to keep | 9 |
the connection all night long | 10 |
but you pull away to draw on your gloves. | 11 |
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On the sidewalk in the cold, | 12 |
you whistle, conjuring a taxi. | 13 |
You blow one last ring of pale smoke | 14 |
into the slate-grey sky, | 15 |
crush the butt beneath your heel and smile. | 16 |
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“She sure did sing, Baby, didn’t she?” | 17 |
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The street lamp glare on the window | 18 |
hid your face so that I can still | 19 |
pretend you waved good-bye. | 20 |
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14 Feb 06 |
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Hmmm... I really like this.
I can see it.
Maybe I've gone to one too many clubs, but I could truly see this.
At my favorite old hang out, they play "Chicago" as the last song... you know, the one they play to kick out all the drunks that haven't left yet.
Oh... and to get freaks like me off the dance floor. (otherwise I'd just keep dancing all night, you know)
— aforbing
Thank you, Forbster! I was going for a 1930's clubby kind of mood - bobbed hair, silk stockings, pay a dime for a dance, etc., when smoking was cool and good girls wanted to but didn't say if they did.
— Isabelle5
Figures it was you... I almost said to myself: "You know this is IMC, so say something to that effect". However, I figured it was no matter if it WAS or WASN'T you, Isabelle, it was still a damn good ditty. Which is what I wrote.
— aforbing
Wow, I love this. This is wondefully written and the imagry is perfect. The only thing that throws me off is the title...
— fallinforyou
Yeah, that title was vague. This might be better or I might just say "Fat Lady's Song," and hope everyone gets the point.
— Isabelle5
I like this. I get the impression of a real old like 1940's club, when the men wore those hats, u know the ones? To be honest I can't think of any improvement at the moment but if you're revising it I would say DON'T include any more suggestions that he's not interested. 'but you pull away to draw on your gloves' is a brilliant line and it and the last line are enough to make it clear.
— MFine
Im MFine, needed a new profile.
— Cocoshmoco
I love that you all got the feel of the early 1900's years. Not having been there, I had to imagine but the Muse must have given me the right wording if it comes out as clear as it did.
(Bows to the Muse in all of us.)
— Isabelle5
What do you mean "not having been there"?
— unknown
I like the title much more, now.
— fallinforyou
Not having been there means I was not around in the early part of this century! I never attended a dance of this kind. What did you think it meant? How old do you think I am???
— Isabelle5
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