| "maybe she's born with it maybe it's maybelline"
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unknown
| when she talked | 1 |
her neck would | 2 |
oscillate like a | 3 |
tired accordion, | 4 |
her face cinematic | 5 |
100 per cent | 6 |
wrinkle free, | 7 |
would shrink in the | 8 |
shower but | 9 |
leased to please, | 10 |
her teeth - | 11 |
halogen lamps | 12 |
to her industrial strength | 13 |
tan - she irradiated | 14 |
perfection and no sweat | 15 |
from her glands, | 16 |
angioedema lips | 17 |
not angie jolie, | 18 |
her palmlines | 19 |
were barcodes | 20 |
botox buttocks | 21 |
no crease. | 22 |
her granite breasts | 23 |
made every doorman | 24 |
swell and when | 25 |
she removed | 26 |
her panties | 27 |
she even had that | 28 |
new car smell | 29 |
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14 Feb 06 |
Rated 8.7 (8.1) by 12 users.
Active (12): 4, 8, 8, 9, 9, 9, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10
Inactive (15): 4, 5, 6, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10, 10
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(11 users consider this poem a favorite)
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Smirk. Ohhh, truth.
I like it.
How about some expansion?
— mouse
agreed i am working on it. i m still getting used to her smell.
— unknown
Witty. I especially liked "irradiated perfection". Could be polished a lot, but the imperfectness contrasts nicely with the subject. Not a bad read.
— wendz
ooh ah
oooooooooh ah
ooooooooooh ah ah
come on baby yah yah
nua nua in tua
— unknown
wa wa goo gooo gaa gaa
— unknown
Haha, this is funny. I enjoyed it.
— fallinforyou
travis loves moana
— unknown
LOL PHUKINMAD LOVEIT
— unknown
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! That last line is just a killer!
— Isabelle5
Hmm, suspiciously like one of those Living Dolls that cost $1500 and up!
— Isabelle5
impertinent and pertinent.
— unknown
yeah? yeah? you like it, you want it? ps moana loves pseudo travis more. Those better be colossal pieces of granite ur referring to. otherwise why bother?!
— unknown
hahahahah amusin
— unknown
wtf is this? go home and play with your doll.
— unknown
HaHaha.Yes sir. You write well.
— gingerdave
OFFENSIVE FOR THE PENSIVE.
— unknown
lol new car smell... funny
— graceb
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAH!!!
— unknown
Absolutely excellent ,imaginative,well put together,smooth, and thats just the tart with the spare parts. Great poem,sooo LOL
— larrylark
using the third person was is a big mistake!
Toni Contralto
— unknown
LOL. i know who you are. we ll get you some boobs dont worry to go with those latex labia.
— unknown
Lordy lordy ! despicably funny!
— unknown
ewie
— unknown
appalling!! well least she smells better than them sheeep.
— unknown
let us love
let us love one another
brothas and sisters
and mother fukers
Shieze Vernazie
— unknown
I've had pwastic suwgewy too, and it is no waughing mattew
— unknown
i did not know your post surgical vagina was replete with sponges of verbiage
— unknown
and the oscar goes to transamerica
dolly parton
— unknown
this is hilarious. 10 for making me spit coffe all over myself.
— noodleman
smegma aint coffee
— unknown
one mooooooore facelift and she'll have a beeeeeeard
glorious vanderbuilt
— noodleman
Wonderful, it's good to find a poet here. I loved the images that you used in this piece. I'm not sure granite's appropriate though, I think of it as being very old and worn, which I'm not sure was the effect that you were aiming at. Also, the 'better smile than the Mona Lisa' is a cliche. Your first similie is the best.
— TheDiogenes
where have all the poets gone?
sadi stick
— unknown
thanks. i am working on make it a little more sharp. my doll not the poem.
— unknown
So clever, so awesome, so true! Amen. Great job! I love the "new car smell" of L31 and really...aren't our bodies truly vehicles anyway??? - Excellent poem! "10".
— starr
I read on someone elses poem that accordian is cliché. This can't be true?
— unknown
lol this was excellent, killer last line, love it.
— Ink_drinker
Nice. I like the imagery and line-breaks. I love lines fourteen and thirty-one.
— boromir4121
um. Line breaks papi. Maybe some punctuation. I dunno. it could be way better, doesn't quite deserve the top rated spot.
— unknown
i liked it. good.
— OKcomputer
I think part of the top rate part is that it's FUNNY. Damned hard to find humor here sometimes and when it hits, you have to reward it.
— Isabelle5
this is not funny. i cannot help it if my vulva smells of a volvo.
— unknown
hahah
— unknown
British snobbery
-snuggy huggies
— unknown
lol
— unknown
Entertaining.
— weed
fuc
— unknown
new changes
— unknown
maybe its plasticine
— unknown
Fabulous! Loved it. I'm smiling. Thanks :)
— CervusWright
hahahah
— unknown
hahahhah!!!
— unknown
Really good.
— K10
blimey. perslick.
— bettalpha
HAHA
— unknown
this is great fun, with underlying depths
— unknown
maybe its porcine
— unknown
Lord Drool isn't Cool (any more)
— unknown
never was
— unknown
v bad
— unknown
zz
— unknown
Happy Valentine to you too! What'ya gonna get her? "New Car" by CK???!!
— JustineCH
I hate the new car smell. Smells stale. I guess this perfect girl has some problems. Crotch rot or a horrible infection. 9/10
— Henry
hahaha
— unknown
haha, very amusing work. granite breasts eh? welcoming, haha.
thanks for the read
— steveroggenb
HAHAHAH love da endin
— unknown
I think this should be banned.
The word 'born' offends me.
— unknown
yeah, yeah, you're a champion of free speech, we're hypocrites, all that rag...
PC sees someone like you every couple of months, then you get distracted or fed up and move on
fischer-price revolutionaries
— unknown
"Maybe she's born with it..maybe it's plastic surgery" was a line which made me laugh like hell from the Melbourne COmedy Festival some years ago. Does Maybelline have a double L? I wouldn't know, just a query.
I love "irradiated perfection", and that new car smell. This is funny because it is, but sad because it's real. Nice work man.
— wendz
Witty. I especially liked "irradiated perfection". Could be polished a lot, but the imperfectness contrasts nicely with the subject. Not a bad read.
— wendz
— unknown
makes me think of pam anderson.. and that's not a bad thing.. nice work!
— majan
LOVE the last seven lines. LOVE.
— Erowen
funny - observant - witty and true
nice modern piece
— Mongrol
this is really funny. not immature. just simply amusing.
— listen
loved it
— humblebee
great humour and cynicism wrapped up in product perfection..
love it still very much
— Mongrol
ooh, i like it very much indeed.
— unknown
*snotty elite poet face*
funny funny funny. women & technology...perfect poetry stuff for 21st century...what suprised me though (and made me like it beyond my mean little chuckles) is the bitterness which somehow seeps through. very well done, that. props to the rhythm (sp?) and subtle rhyme and line length and...
well you get the point.
— gem_grrrl
Love it
— Pecquie
ahahahaha
i love this
— gac
Didn't want to read this at at because of the title. Please change it.
— unknown
nice poem
— teddy
we will provide a plan to harness that stink
alan mulally
— unknown
lemme just get into the bandwagon here.
: )
— fractalcore
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