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dannny

my brother had a bottle of vodka,
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it was hidden in his closet,
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so i took some ice,
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and some green tea,
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and made myself a drink.
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i took my pencil out of a drawer,
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and wrote a few alcohol-soaked words,
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about love and life,
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about hate and death,
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but no words could capture
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what i wanted to say.
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my speech became slurred,
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but my pencil kept steady,
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and I composed a letter that never got mailed,
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she'll never see these words i wrote for her,
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and its not because i ran out of stamps.
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16 Feb 06

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'lick it before you stick it'
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postage due, rhymes with 2.
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was there a postal strike?
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I really like this!  I decided to check out your other poems after reading "Laura in the passenger seat" and I must say, I am very much impressed.  Thank you!
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-the previous comment was posted by myself
 — OwlGirl

i so feel this. I really dig your style, i just read training wheels. . i'm going to be reading all your poems, thanks for the pleasure dan.
 — majan

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