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THONG ORGY
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Y  (   !  )  Y
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   Y  YY
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           YY  Y  YY        
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                                       (  Y )
 5
 
 
   Y   (   !   )
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 7
       Y (!) Y
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         YY
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 10
                            
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    P (  !  )
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(                        !                          )
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16 Feb 06

Rated 10 (4.3) by 1 users.
Active (1): 10
Inactive (19): 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 2, 7, 8, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10

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THIS IS NOT A POEM.  SUGGEST YOU GO FIND AN AVANTE GARDE ART SITE.
 — Isabelle5

haha
 — onestepshort

i repeat, haha.

not the best, but better than some.
 — inutile

well i love it
says a whole lot more then some of the poetry I see posted here
 — unknown

It's cute.
It's clever.
It is not a poem.
 — Isabelle5

Not poetry but I still liked it.
 — Scotty-Boy

the gold medal for the new low goes to Y
 — unknown

AVANTE GARDE



are you a savant-e?


NOT
 — unknown

HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHA
ooooo
hahahahahahahh
 — unknown

oh baby when my w and your y get together its on!!!
 — unknown

believe me youre on your own .
 — unknown

right about that!! i can get this party started on my own!!
 — unknown

LOLOL good. Just close your blinds and shut your mouth.
 — unknown

     (   !   )          &nbs p;        -  you with your thong off
 — unknown

nah blinds open, im a bit of an exhibitionist, why be an ass and keep the party to yourself??
 — unknown

the above exhibitionist can be reached at 2124035044 ask for moana
 — unknown

WELL PARDON ME FOR TRYING TO SERVICE ALL OF MANHATTAN!!!!!
 — unknown

ummmmmmm more words please!!!!
 — unknown

  what moana shoulda said at the fantasy date--"arivderci molto stupid-o ciao!!!" hahahaha
 — unknown

i feel so blessed to have stumbled upon this.
 — unknown

zzz zzzzzzzzzzz
 — unknown

For God's sake, what is wrong with you?
 — marieF

no really, people are starting to get really nasty. and too many unknowns. and the poem is more like..well, i dont know, definatly not like a poem!
 — unbreakable

dumbass
 — unknown

confused ?!?
R
 — Rousseau

ass thongs
 — unknown

lol one penis?
 — unknown

put your thong back on ghettobutt
 — unknown

This made me smile, thankyou.
 — kimado

PORN for the cheap person
 — unknown

thanks

gary glitter
 — unknown

i like it. so sue me.
 — noodleman

  What is this shit??Can someone please decode thong hieroglyphics as displayed above??
 — unknown

That one penis must be exhausted amongst all those vaginas!!
 — unknown

lolololol.   effortless retardation.


authors mother
 — unknown

who says men dont wear thongs?  homo orgy Aiigght
 — unknown

dedicated to slobogonad milosevic
 — unknown

I like the finish on the note of wideload buttcrack.
sublime.  
 — netskyIam

Grow up y'all. You'd think you'd never seen real buttocks.
 — unknown

cut the crap reese!!!
 — unknown

a tour de force!!! riveting!!! scintillating!
 — unknown

Haw, haw, haw :D

Great for a smile..
 — CervusWright

well, this is a lot suckier than it was last time i saw it.
 — inutile

This may be 'funny' or give people 'laughs,' but sorry to say: IT'S NOT POETRY.
 — fallinforyou

I know I left comment here previously which didn't seem to post...but the proper way to "draw" a thong would be ( Y ) that is if the thong be worn.  As it is as this being a poem though...no, it's not.  it's cute and I suppose it was fun to draw up, but it's not poetry.

Jo
 — NoWayJo

Y Y Y do I  lurvisual poems so much. I guess its cus I'm obsessed with ordinance survey maps where you can spread a detailed map out of part of the world ,marvel at its pretty calligraphy yet it don't tell you a thing exept how to get from A to B and how to avoid your thong sweating up while sat on top of a moumtain reading girlie mags on a hot summers day.
 — larrylark

still a 10
 — noodleman

lol..
wow... =]
 — SojT

wow! it looks to me that you have a whole family wearing thongs. lol
        .....i wonder who they are supposed to be??.....

could this be some type of poem in alien?    

NOT!

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! get a life, seriously
 — unknown

The more I see this, the funnier it gets, now that I am somewhat more familiar with thongs...haha
 — Isabelle5

i think you need to find a new hobby.
 — unknown

Wow. You're retarded. It's not even funny.
 — HardRocks

I don't really get it, but it is original.  It isn't a poem.
 — propoet50

I love shit like this. Call it arty, avant garde, etc. Whatever it is, it's invoked a reaction from the people, and that's more than a lot of poetry on this website does. It's verse in complete punk style.
 — mixtapeboy

This is not a pipe.
 — aerol

I'll just give you a 1, you deserve one!
 — icepineapple

A lot of fun, fits well with my definition of poetry
rulerulerulerulerulerulerulerulerulerulerulerule
 — tanamac

oops/ forgot the quotes
\"ruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleruleru lerulerulerulerulerule\"
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                       ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;      Pio
 — tanamac

I like it.
 — OKcomputer

It's...whimsical. And I agree with mixtapeboy. Very punk rock in a way.

Way to fuck with the entire site without being overly offensive.

[Teo]
 — teo_omega11

I don't understand the P, guys. Someone explain the P to me. Please.
 — jcameron

jcameron! it is a tongue! OBVIOUSLY.
 — ruyi

how many do you need for an orgy?
 — unknown

o my hilarious
 — unknown

interesting and quite cute.
 — lanezfairy

Even I didn't write this one
 — Maximilian

i don't get it
 — unknown

LOL

ass is kool
 — unknown

Y  YYY did I bother to read (?) this?
 — skinnyJon

everbody has regret after the temptation of ass
 — unknown

still turns me on
 — unknown

encore!
 — unknown

Thanks again, Random!  I needed a good laugh
 — Isabelle5

i think i've read/seen this before, hehe.
very nice.
: )
 — fractalcore

It is now Sept, 08.  I still remember this poemparty! It's great!
 — netskyIam

omg

usher
 — unknown

i m drunk its kool
 — unknown

Omg
 — unknown

respeck
 — unknown

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